dpoetessrock
Mar 29, 2019
This poem is part of the workshop:

Cellar Door

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Cellar Door

Poem Body

Fit for a king in his castle, a strong cellar door.
It leads to the basement floor. Built by an old wise man using the finest cedar wood. Three metal hinges and a crystal knob decorates the door face.
Shutting out the rest of the house, no one dares to enter
through the rectangle shape door. In his secret place gramps keeps his skeleton key that locks the cellar door. to his workshop. Each day he tip toes down a pair of spiral
shape stairs where he builds creative rocking chairs.
His queen knows hard work is beyond the cedar cellar door. To summon him for dinner or a snack, she uses a bell strap. She greets him with a treat as he exits, with a long sweet kiss that knocks him off his feet.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Baltimore/Maryland USA

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Comments

Rula

I bet this wasn't any easy to read but you really did it justice.
Your efforts show.
Thank you!

S

I think this is excellent poetic prose. It has a lot of rhyme and alliteration which takes it from wave to wave. I liked it

Rula

the reference to the royals, the secrecy that lies behind the cellar door and finally the door been made from the cedar adds srtength to it.
Thank you for your submission rock.