A Discourse by Two Mortal Enemies Whose Wish Is Peace

Poem Body

I surrender my Faith to your protection...

Your Faith is as an honored guest in my home...

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Canada, CAN

Favorite Poets: The next one I read. I thoroughly enjoy reading the works of amateur poets. Neruda is my hero but absolutely no one has a better way with words than Shakespeare.

Comments

Hi Josephus

An interesting start to a poem but I was expecting more of it.

John

As Dalton has said, the talk between the two should be more binding if both wanted peace, there is a quandary here.
They should both have talked about the person and not the beliefs ether of them had, it would have made more of an acceptance..
Yours Ian.T

I liked what you wrote...

I liked what you wrote. Maybe Ian T. gave it more thought than I did. I just thought the "poem" was too short I wanted more. Just my opinion

John

It is a Zulu greeting to another, They just say "I see you"
This greeting in its simplicity means a lot to the two that are meeting.
In those three words they totally accept the other person.
I might be corrected here but I have always accepted it so,
It was really good to be greeted in such a way,
Yours Ian.T

Hi Josephus

I still think this is a strong piece handled well. It has the feel of ancient wisdom. That sounds bad but you know what I mean. Still leaves me with a thirst for more.

John

Hmmm....

I might be reading more into this than is here but it sounds like a Muslim who has immagrated to America where he knows he is safe practicing his religion.................stan