Duke Energy Nightmare

Poem Body

Lightening flashes hot
Sparks fly from pole blindingly
Ear-splitting cacophony

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Motivation and focus: We had a good storm a few nights ago. There were a couple very close bolts... I just embellished some with a fried transformer.

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

Comments

I am going...

to make an assumption that your local power co. is named: Duke Energy? Good one, you managed to pick words that will be argued about. [If they are two or three syllables]. But that's okay, I think it makes it more interesting. ~ Geez.
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Duke Energy Nightmare

I agree with Teddy and Geezer - really like this. Love your language to describe sight and sound!
Thank you!

Thanks, all!

Now we're dealing with a real Duke Energy nightmare! I smell a sequel....

Hi Jess

Until reading the comments above, i couldn't figure out what's relevance of Duke...now it makes sense....i like short poems...yet wonder what form you mean when you say it's structured eastern?

have a good day..