Emptiness is a door to hope Belief is a mentality in the shrugged to cope.
Reality is the deceiver, seducing every dream beyond a reasonable reason. Wishing each wish is hope taking emptiness to a new meaning.
What is left? Is the emptiness of believing?
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Interesting title and good subject. Only thing I would suggest is to divide the first 2 lines into shorter lines to break up into individual thoughts...............stan
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Wow guys thanks for all the replies it’s been a lone time since I posted a poem so I am a little rusty but sincerely thank for the love
Mr. Press
I agree with Stan, I divided it to understand it too:-
Emptiness is a door to hope
Belief is a mentality in the shrugged to cope.
Reality is the deceiver, seducing every dream
beyond a reasonable reason.
Wishing each wish
is hope taking emptiness to a new meaning.
What is left,
is the emptiness of believing?
I wonder what one believes after this?
We all thrive on make-belief, it gives life
its dressing, or garb of splendour,
and no more so than in poetry.
"beyond a reasonable reason" sounds like a riddle.
I liked the rhythm of the poem
and the thoughts came out like lights
lighting up one after the other.
I was tossed from here to there
in my brain and enjoyed the ride.
Ann of Norway.
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Wow guys thanks for all the replies it’s been a lone time since I posted a poem so I am a little rusty but sincerely thank for the love
Intriqing title and poem
I read three times
And in my weary, exhausted brain and body
To cope, to hope, and to believe is a door to emptiness.
Therefore, I walk in a way toward a door leading to emptiness
Squeaking loudly in my ear
I like this fery deep
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Wow guys thanks for all the replies it’s been a lone time since I posted a poem so I am a little rusty but sincerely thank for the love . Hey Barbara how are U doing. lord ha sent Neopoet come a long way I am delighted to see U are still writing because we go back a long way to the first site I hope all is with your !!!
Hey been missing you around here
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I still hanging on to life. Hope all is good with you,
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U said still hanging on to life. remember life is hanging on U when U look in the mirror do U not see life U Babara think about this sentence example is the glass half full or half empty
My glass is half full lol
As I hang on