Poem Body
We were like the tide
drifting away with our
shallow streams
of dreams .
Never really knowing
which way the wind
was blowing .
But as the days
dimmed to dawn
we wake up the
next morning
and they’re gone .
Leaving us alone
with one thing to do
move on .
Comments
My inspiration
https://youtu.be/5zHVFXorF38
hello Edward,
your poem is succinct and comes to the point. I admire this. my favorite lines are:
Leaving us alone
with one thing to do
move on .
always, Cat
their gone
did you mean/////they are gone
good catch!!!
good eye and good catch, lovedly!
*hugs, Cat
Yes I did
Thank you lovedly my head is constantly in and out with pain to the point where it’s feels like it’s just drifting. Anyways thank you
The message of this is you have to keep going even through the hardships you can’t just stop.
Because the world doesn’t care if you just gave up it just goes on without you so you would have to learn to move on and keep the memories.
you are still a good poet kid
'Iwas when young
many times fazed all were still
at my intelligence amazed
Thanks to HUMAN WILL
I get those brainless waves
often still
Edward Nigma I enjoyed your
Edward Nigma I enjoyed your poem, captured the theme very well.
Your style
Is very classical or it echoes an older time. You have a way of showing me really intricate feelings through a large lens. That is you take a broad topic, something everyone can relate to, and then focus it right on one aspect. You do it quick and concise which amplifies this focus. It’s the second time I felt that way reading your stuff.
Great job.
Tim
Oh, and great title!
It’s perfect.
My strategy or idea on writing poetry
A poem is like an arrow it has to have a point in order to be effective .