Hear Your Heart

This poem exhibits your special wisdom that makes you, you! A lovely thought put to paper! I loved it all. I have no suggestions, just appreciation for the work!

always, Cat

I fear too many are surrounded by so much "noise" that they Never hear their own heart speaking. In line 7 you might consider dropping "of"..................stan

a regular heart DUM DUM DUM is only the echo of the grave.
A heart that beats to poetry goes da DUM da DUM da DUM
and if it gets irregular it leads to the grave.

Only a heart that knows it's da DUM nature can change the beat without dying.

Now you have done it talking about De Dum's in your poetry you have awoken the great Elf of the southern skies, he will Da Dum at least five times a line of poetry, he also has a special name for it Penti something.
It is really good that you have attracted his words to this.
A fun write I don't think that I could take 14 lines of Da Dum's though lol.
Take care and a lovely write,
Yours Ian.T

rula
I always cringe when I see the word ‘beautiful’ as a descriptive… poetry is supposed to be describing it, using the word doesn’t work

find a word that, to you, describes the beauty of the sonnet

‘It has a unique regular’ - ‘it has’ should be 'they have' – your subject has been the beats, not the heart,
‘ de Dum de Dum’ – a bit mundane – onomatopeia I know, but weak imo
low and high pitches. – seems unnecessary to me – seems to be a repeat of ‘what you just said’

can I suggest something more like
with an unique regular
iambic thrum
a personal tone

‘this unique’ – you have used ‘unique’ already….

‘make the heart flow smoothly’ – (grammar - makes – needs an ‘s’)

‘ to form the most
beautiful sonnet – (and I’ve already said what I think of this :) )
Of life.’

with a few tweaks this would be an awesome write rula
love judy
xxx