Ruby Lord
Ruby Lord
May 27, 2023

HONEY AND WHEAT

Poem Body

A honey-coloured cottage with a roof made of red tiles,
The door is painted yellow, it gives passers-by welcome smiles.
The path is old and worn out, its character complete,
A field across the road is where the farmer grows his wheat.

The cars they drive past slowly, to enjoy the view,
And the horses come to speak to me as horses often do.
The clouds touch the landscape at the edge of the scene,
And when it’s good and hot the air smells lush and verdant green.

Foxes dart through the meadow, hungry after sleep,
Eyes peep out between the stems, stealthily they creep.
The birds fly high above, prior to their swoop,
Before they come together in a murmuration group.

Sunset touches landscape as she grows heavy, cool, and tired,
As light leaves the vista, it is time to be inspired.
The cockerel crows it’s late, and he struts and scrapes his feet,
To see a sight as grand as this, I’m so happy on my street.

The moon he shines his silver rays and the meadow is an ocean,
The crop is captured in the wind stirring with emotion.
Brittle light picks out black fur and illuminates white stripe,
A badger becomes frisky and he shrieks a playful gripe.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I'm trying to write in a happier mode instead of my usual ranting political themes. I hope I've managed it this time.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: I like Margaret Atwoods poetry and I enjoy her writing. She has a natural ability to make her fiction read like poetry, if you read closely you will see it., I have a good understanding of the English language but I don't always follow the rules as I can be a little lazy and sometimes I'm just tired., I've been inspired reading the poetry on Neopoet and have enjoyed analysing other people's work.

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Honey and Wheat" paints a picturesque scene of a countryside cottage surrounded by wheat fields. The imagery is vivid and evocative, transporting the reader to the idyllic setting. The use of color in the description of the cottage, from the honey-colored walls to the red tile roof, is particularly effective in creating a sense of warmth and comfort. The poem's rhythm is consistent and flows smoothly from one stanza to the next, adding to the overall peacefulness of the scene.

One suggested line edit would be to change "The cars they drive past slowly" to "Cars drive past slowly." This slight revision would streamline the line and make it more concise.

Overall, "Honey and Wheat" is a lovely poem that captures the beauty of the natural world and reminds us to appreciate the simple pleasures in life.

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Ruby Lord

Thanks Bot. But I now have a West Country accent and I can't help myself from using it when I'm writing about where I live. So, "the cars, they drive past slowly" is natural to me :) I like the mixture of accents I have in my head, they're useful. :)

Alex Tanner

Like looking at a painting, calming and serene. Alex,

Ruby Lord

Thank you, I try to use my brushes whenever I can, but to be honest, I cannot paint, draw or sketch to save my life. I have to do it with my words. Ruby :)

Ruby Lord

Thank you Tigger for reading my poem and your lovely commens. I'm happy the images were strong enough to imagine yourself here. Ruby :)