kowque
kowque
Jun 22, 2024

I'm angry

Poem Body

That you moved on.

I thought we were forever.

Then, I thought we were a few years.

But, no matter how much I tried to squeeze my hope into some type of "something"

It didn't work.

I lost you.

And now I have to see you be happy,without me.

I guess I was the problem.

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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neopoet

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively conveys feelings of loss, disappointment, and self-reflection. The repetition of "I thought" emphasizes the speaker's evolving understanding of the relationship. The use of short, fragmented lines creates a sense of emotional turmoil and the abrupt ending with "I guess I was the problem" leaves a strong impact. Consider exploring more vivid imagery or specific details to enhance the emotional depth of the poem and engage the reader further. Additionally, reflecting on how the speaker's anger manifests or evolves throughout the piece could add complexity to the theme.

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RoseBlack

I know this feeling all too well. You may not have been the problem, it may have been them and how quick they were to replace you. It is so difficult when one is ready to let go and the other isn't. Anger is normal when promises were made. Be kind to yourself. Happiness awaits.

Candlewitch

One thing I can tell you is that this person was not worth the pain they caused you...let them turn to dust and be glad you are free because you are worth it!

*hugs, Cat