Poem Body
spring lady beetles
destroy soft, sap-filled aphids-
faultless peach roses
spring lady beetles
destroy soft, sap-filled aphids-
faultless peach roses
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Used to buy ladybugs from bug sellers
To keep the bad one at bay. Here in NC, there are so many bad bugs.
Yes...
that last line is best. Not that the rest is bad; just that is the best! ~ Geez.
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It works well.
It works well.
I'm with Mark, you don't need a dash.
Obi.
Thanks all for stopping by
to see my roses. I agree with the removal of the dash. When in doubt, take it out! I also stole some alliteration from Geezer. Much appreciated everyone.
Yes, I am indecisive about it . . .
the green makes it more visual, but I was originally going for soft sounds, "s", "ph". Dilemma!
Yes, I am indecisive about it . . .
the green makes it more visual, but I was originally going for soft sounds, "s", "ph". Dilemma!
How about...
[filled] instead of green? ~ Geez.
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Yes, I like that
stolen and bastardized. Thank you.
Yer welcome...
my pleasure!
Congrats on winning the contest.
Those cute little lady bugs are monsters to some other insects lol
Kalon
Thank you. Actually, I thought I was quite done with this poem and it was by accident. I was reading a book: Reclaiming Beauty for the Good of the World and came across a discussion of the word and I thought "Perfect!" and popped it in.
Congrats on winning the
Congrats on winning the contest Arrow!
Cheers
Congratulations!...
on winning the June contest! ~ Geez.
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Thanks for the congratulations
all! I appreciate it.