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Jan 29, 2014

kid man!

Poem Body

Do you all know,
one day yet
to one's birthday
one is a child
and
a day after the 18th birthday
one becomes a man(woman)

now tell me
a crime committed on a day
short of 18
one is dealt with
like one was a kid
and
a day after he cuts the eighteenth slice
he becomes a man

then what is his position
as he cuts the cake
and
pierces his ex

will you treat him
as a man
o tell me
fair man!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ROU

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Comments

Seren

Seren

11 years 2 months ago

If he's cutting the cake he's already there, in my world we don't cut cakes until we are that age so he would be a man in my eyes,

I get the feeling that this was a comment am I right ?

love JC xxx