You'll have to tame
those goats of yours
rummaging in bins
with appetites hearty!
Their gizzards are bloated, swollen and farty!
It's not the same
wearing this dress
it's feeling quite snug;
with cleavages bulging.
I can't help thinking I'm over indulging!
Oh what a game
sharing a bed
tossing and turning
that's just the way it goes.
Him with his sharp nails and big toe up me nose!
It feels so lame
getting older
with my teeth worn down
and my old knees creaking
And those drain pipes aren't the only things leaking!
What's in a name?
A wedding day
me married to you
that first enduring kiss
And all those eternal, years...and...years of......bliss!
------------------------ Original below ---------------------------
SHAME ON YOU - shame on you!
you earthly gods!
stealing young children,
using them as sex slaves.
Your cold bones will crumble to dust in your graves.
SHAME ON YOU - shame on you!
you business men!
skinning animals,
while hearing their screams.
Your dead hearts will fill you with frightening dreams.
SHAME ON YOU - shame on you!
you charlatans!
pretending you care.
making profit from greed.
Your thick blood will clog up your veins when you bleed.
SHAME ON YOU - shame on you!
you law judges!
enticed by a bribe,
always changing the rules.
Your mind's will be shackled like unrestrained fools.
SHAME ON YOU - shame on you!
propagandists!
encouraging war,
hiding behind God‘s name.
Your bleak soul will wither while playing this game.
SHAME ON YOU - shame on you!
you rich bankers!
ripping off the poor,
while you laugh in their face.
Your deeds will be loathed in eternal disgrace.
Comments
hellooooo Mand
I would call this mocking fun in poetry. We laugh on life and life on us... I think you did great!!
Have you forgotten choosing the Work shop's name from the drop-list?
Helloooo back to you too! lol
Nop! I did it! ( I think ) - unless of course I did something wrong - which is always possible, likely, could well happen. Lol
Hopefully I'll manage to catch up with reading everyone else's poem - tomorrow! ( unless something unexpected crops up ).
Thanks Rula :) always enjoy your visits.
Love Mand xxxx
Mand
Great pieces of fun, and as they should be.
Different from the normal flow but we coped with the change of style,
Yours Ian xx
Hi Ian
'Tis a strange flow isn't it - takes a bit of getting used to. Glad you liked the humour though!
Nice of you to read and make a comment. :)
Love to you
Mand xxxxx
Mand
You is up too late it is cold and dark and there are many nasties out there to be sorted lol.
You get to bed it's 00-20 you'll be writing gibberish in the morrow.
Night, Night ,Yours Ian. xx
Night night! :) xxxx
Night night - sleep tight :). Zzzzzzz
this is fun mand
But what poem of yours did you change?
It would be helpful if you put the original here for comparison
love judy
xxx
Hi Judy
Thanks for letting me know! :) Muchly appreciated.
Love Mand xxxx
Mand
Nice job there , very nice
Thanks :)
Nice of you to say so! xxx :)
Look after your self :)
Love Mand xxxx
very nice but why all those caps
minor typo
OVER INDUDGING! ..... indulging perhaps
Thanks Lovedly
Well spotted! :)
In the original poem I put caps because I was shouting - it was a rant. :)
In the second poem it's for effect! Well that's the theory. :)
You prefer it to be without the caps? :)
Love Mand xxxx
Oops
Saved it twice!
Oddly,
I like the original better than the new. I had missed this poem Judy and I'm glad I had the chance to catch it here.
Some of the line lengths are a little too long for me, but nothing catastrophic.
Wes!!!
Do you think it would be better if I gave it an edit to shorten the last line and dropped the capitals?
( on both of them )
Your opinion matters to me! :)
Love Mand xxxxx
Mand
Nice switch by allowing the fun elements in you poke out in this revised version...
Much love and clap..clap...clap...did ya hear them?
Raj !!!
Loud and clear! :)
Thanks Raj - me buddy! Great to hear from ya :) You are sooo encouraging!
Love Mand xxxxxxx
Hey mandy
You did a good job making fun of growing old . But that's about the only defense we have against it ain't it? lol. I have only one suggestion : last line there should be a pregnant pause.......right before "bliss" to add to doubt about how blissful it Is lol........now I'll shut up..........stan
Hellooooo
Lol! Spot on! :) xxx
Love Mand xxxx
mand
good work here. You did well..
Alid
Thanks Alid
Kind of you to say so! Muchly appreciated.
Love Mand xxx