Lord High Inquisitor by: eddy styx

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Lord High Inquisitor" presents a vivid image of a conversation filled with tension and conflict. The metaphor of lies being like apple pies on a bench is intriguing, suggesting a sense of domesticity and comfort that contrasts with the harsh reality of dishonesty. However, the transition from this metaphor to the speaker's confrontation with the person telling lies could be smoother. The sudden shift from the metaphor to the direct conversation might be jarring for some readers.

The ending of the poem, with its reference to medieval torture devices, adds a layer of dark humor. However, the connection between this and the rest of the poem could be made clearer. As it stands, the leap from a conversation about lies to a choice between torture devices might confuse readers.

The dialogue in the poem could also benefit from more context or explanation. Without more information about who the speaker and the other person are, or what their relationship is, it's hard for readers to fully engage with the poem. Providing more details about the characters or their situation could help readers connect more deeply with the poem.

In terms of structure, the poem's line breaks and punctuation generally work well to control the pace and rhythm. However, the use of quotation marks in the final lines is inconsistent. If the speaker is the one suggesting the rack or the Iron Maiden, then the quotation marks should start before "the rack" rather than before "or the Iron Maiden".

Overall, the poem has an interesting concept and some strong imagery, but could benefit from clearer transitions, more context, and consistent punctuation.

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Mistress Manipulator... "Whooo! What a dialog! Remember when we did those little vignettes? What workshop was that?
Damn, can't remember his name...This would be a perfect scenario! Anyway, very nicely done! ~ Geez.
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Good stuff Cat! I enjoyed the dialog as well, but now I have a hankering for pie that will need my attention!!!

Curious, whay do you attribute some of your work to "Eddy Styx" (C.M. Mattison?). I haven't read anything by him, but maybe these pieces you attribute to him are inspired by his work? Maybe I missed a conversation/workshop/or someting else, so hopefully you'll pardon my ignorance here.

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seems I'm a bit late to this. I really like the theme here though I found some lines a hard bite, but seems I'm the only one here. Maybe I have to read it more than once or twice?
Anyway, I would like for some help if my friend doesn't mind. :)

My favorite is the opening stanza. such an innovative metaphor.
Thank you for sharing dear. Always great to read your thoughts and words.