Poem Body
Asking me what you did wrong,
I told you that you did not listen,
you are not listening to me still,
could have wiped away tears that glisten.
You were too much of a Man's Man,
a two-fisted hard bodied drinker.
you never noticed it was slipping away
what you needed was a good head-shrinker.
Figuring out the mess you were creating
did you think in your hands you had it made?
Love was a treasure you could not tarnish
if only you had followed your heart and obeyed.
You did not realize how fragile love can be
I told you, be careful, not throw it away.
there are only so many chances allotted to a person
once used up, forever gone, fleeting like the day...
Comments
I really liked your poem. It
I really liked your poem. It sounds as though you have had some sadness in your life. This poem
Shows some deep emotion
thank you, Clentin
yes, I wrote this about my first husband. he would later ask me to take him back. but he had broken too many trusts, my heart was in saturation concerning him. you are very astute in your observations. thank you. I appreciate you.
*hugs, Cat
Hmmmm....
sounds as if the protagonist's partner caused his own chaos.I regret that this is based on reality as nobody needs to go through this
thank you Stan,
yea, it is based on reality. thank you for your observations, I appreciate them. I hope you are well. we are almost through with the Winter weather. I hope we do not get any more snow storms. it has snowed here a lot over the past two weeks. we have more than enough!
*love & hugs, Cat
I really love this
How many times we speak and it falls on deaf ears when they really should be listening. Then they seem to figure it out too late and we are left with difficult feelings to sort out.
You were too much of a Man's Man,
a two-fisted hard bodied drinker.
you never noticed it was slipping away
what you needed was a good head-shrinker.
I really like this stanza. There is so much truth that he needed to see in these four lines. Great job!
dear Carrie,
yep! you ave described it exactly! I think maybe they hear us but choose not to believe, due to male ego. then it comes back to bite them in the @ss! thank you for your ideas and opinion, I appreciate you.
*hugs, Cat
Congratulations...
on the win! Nice job, I think that there are a lot of men out there, who conform to the societal norms, and don't ever let themselves have visible emotions and certainly wouldn't listen to a woman about fixing a broken relationship. We still have a lot of work to do; all of us! ~ Geez.
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dear Geezer,
yup! and I married two of them! but the one I have now is pretty damned good! LOL! as you say, we all have a ways to go...listening is the first step... I hope you are well?
*love, Cat
Love lost...
One of my friends once said "all men are coyotes".
Dear Leslie,
thank you for reading and commenting on my poem ;)
*Season's Greetings, Cat
Cat...
I apologize if what I said was in anyway offensive.
Sometimes, even often, I say things that are a little
coarse. I am sorry I feel embarased.
Dear Leslie,
Please do not feel bad! I am so sorry if I inadvertently gave you the idea I was upset! Now I feel bad!!!
*so sorry, Cat
I feel your poem is universal
I feel your poem is universal and applies to many relationships. If one side doesn't listen, the other side stops talking as it's a pointless task and the only defence. For those who experience this, they are the ones who bear the harm. Ruby, xxx
Dear Ruby,
Thank you so very much... it is kinda what happened in my parents situation.
* I wish you a season of wonderful ideas! love, Cat