Ruby Lord
Ruby Lord
Dec 05, 2023
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12/23 3 a.m. 🏆 Winner

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A MESSAGE IN MY DREAMS

Poem Body

As I lay in my bed dreaming, my brother came to me.
We shall speak in the morning, just you wait and see.
He had long been gone, but in the dark I found a trace,
He was hiding in a looking glass, in light his shining grace.

I’m here now sister, lay safe and in your slumber, listen,
I tell my story, with all my love, as I am on a mission,
I’ve come here with a secret, that I have to share.
Let me hold your hand, and touch the silver in your hair.

I’ve brought you a gift, the one you thought was lost,
Irreplaceable and precious, to balance the limitless cost.
He placed it in my hand, in my fist I curled it tight,
And I held it there until I woke, in the morning light.

As I unfurled my fingers, letters spilled into my palm,
Sister dear I love you, this news will hold you warm.
Written in a note, delicate paper floated into flame,
The script spelled out a message in our mother’s name.

I hope this brings you joy, and all happiness you desire,
On the days the breeze is blowing, hear my whispers to inspire.
And butterflies they flutter as your thoughts come to my mind,
I watch you from the distance, my love you will always find.

Her words like heat soothed me, in this fleeting incident,
And there I lay in wonder, of sleeps illusory event.
The ashes in her memory, lay lost on my white soft sheet,
But in tears of joy and sadness, this moment echoes on repeat.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I think it speaks for itself, it speaks to me.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: I like Margaret Atwoods poetry and I enjoy her writing. She has a natural ability to make her fiction read like poetry, if you read closely you will see it., I have a good understanding of the English language but I don't always follow the rules as I can be a little lazy and sometimes I'm just tired., I've been inspired reading the poetry on Neopoet and have enjoyed analysing other people's work.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Such a poignant piece. well composed. My favorite lines are:

I’ve brought you a gift, the one you thought was lost,
Irreplaceable and precious, to balance the limitless cost.
He placed it in my hand, in my fist I curled it tight,
And I held it there until I woke, in the morning light.

thank you for sharing this, it is appreciated!

*love & hugs, Cat

Ruby Lord

Hi Cat, thank you for your read and comments and thank you for posting your favourite lines. I always appreciate your comments. Ruby :) xxx

Lavender

Hello, Ruby,
Like its beautiful final line, the poem reflects on both joy and sadness. This amazing dream feels like a blessing.
Thank you,
Lx

P

My favourite lines are:

As I unfurled my fingers, letters spilled into my palm,
Sister dear I love you, this news will hold you warm.

Leslie

The tŕemor in my hands will not alĺow me to tell you ŵhat I really think,
Hòwever I loved tĥìs one.