ziggy
Feb 18, 2011

MOCKING WORDS

Poem Body

Opinions form before words
they swarm every syllable
subjected to recourse the
hollow hoarse, what else
of course.

Reasons fall victim to treason
upon any plinth that shatters,
the faithful rally not now
don't dilly dally.

The brave never behave
fame etched here on the
grave, remembered in verse
departed yet still belong.

I digress at your behest
my time in passing I won't
invest, subjected but none
the less beyond the intersection
of interaction may well detest.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Country/Region: IRL

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

14 years 2 months ago

what form this adheres to, But I think I get the gist of it. I believe that you are saying, that unless you speak against something, and risk being called a rebel / hero, you will never stand for something. Don't flip-flop, and don't waste time, just say what you feel. ~ Geezer

Z

hi I just noticed a bit of me in what you see in this which is interesting
you are right in what you get from this but there is a little more meaning,
I CAN be very to the point but mostly keep my opinions to my self lol
except when I write ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
I am glad you stopped by to my page cheers Gee ,,,,,,,,,have a good weekend ,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Zigs,

having already seen this prior to posting, I have no critique to offer that I haven't already.

I like the theme and fully understand where you are coming from and going to with this piece.

All-in-all, a tidy job...in true 'ziggish' style.

regards,

HS

Z

ziggy

14 years 2 months ago

In reply to by Hooded Stranger

Yes you have given your critique on this one cheers for that.
ZIGGY style is all I know lol cheers ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

lou

lou

14 years 2 months ago

You know how i feel about this poem.
Had to read again

lou

Z

yes I sent this to you too,
I am glad you approve, cheers
for the edit ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

Z

ziggy

14 years 2 months ago

In reply to by xena465

sorry for my late reply, I am mad busy of late
the pen speaks for all of us here ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Z

ziggy

14 years 2 months ago

In reply to by xena465

sorry for my late reply, I am mad busy of late
the pen speaks for all of us here ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Candlewitch

I digress at your behest
my time in passing I won't
invest, subjected but none
the less beyond the intersection
of interaction may well detest.

I like this very much. Sometimes I just get tongue-tied and the right thing to say abandons me until after the fact. Later with my keyboard, I am much more eloquent! Damn it all!

love, Cat

Z

cat hope your well I have being since, am mad busy as I am trying to get work completed before I go to Spain
on the 6th for 11 days, I am glad you got to see this one, I was just thinking you on your keyboard hood on vocals
and I with my guitar with all 15 cords or so could form a band but who's lyrics lol would kick ass or what lol,,,,,,,
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Welcome to the World Domination Tour with:

Zigs and the Hooded Cat!

regards,

HS

Z

HOOD your quick of the mark with that response lol
I'd love to have us jam some time it would be class
well ye would I'd be crap lol ,,,,,,,,,,zigs ,,,,,,we would
need a name for the band ?????? it would have to
be something dark and pagan lol

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 2 months ago

Zigs,

the band name needs to incorporate what we write...so how about:

Lyrically Speaking or Poetically Speaking.

First album: Poetry In Motion

World Tour: Poetry In Motion Tour

Lol!

HS