Clentin
May 07, 2024

My Military Hero

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My Military Hero

My military hero, my father,
Protecting us at all costs
A true guardian in times of crisis

My father, my hero,
Forever my inspiration,
A soldier, a protector,
Always in my heart

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "My Military Hero" is clear in its theme and sentiment, focusing on the admiration for a father who is also a military figure. The repetition of the phrases "My military hero, my father" and "My father, my hero" effectively emphasizes the poet's deep respect and admiration.

However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery and details. Instead of stating that the father is a protector, it would be more impactful to show how he protects. For example, the poet could include a memory or a specific action that illustrates this trait.

The poem could also benefit from more varied sentence structure. The current structure is quite repetitive, which can make the poem feel monotonous. Varying the sentence structure could make the poem more engaging and dynamic.

Lastly, the poem's emotional impact could be strengthened by exploring the emotions associated with having a father in the military. This could include feelings of pride, worry, or longing, which would add depth to the poem.

In summary, while the poem effectively communicates admiration for a military father, it could be improved by adding specific details, varying sentence structure, and exploring the associated emotions.

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Rula

Rula

11 months 3 weeks ago

Fathers are daughters' heros.
Though my father isn't an army member, yet he's been always of great support to us all.

Best wishes
Thank you for sharing.

zuella

zuella

11 months 3 weeks ago

I love its simplicity, I love how it's short to evoke the emotions quickly. You get straight to the point and it's really beautiful. It's relatable and kind, thank you for posting this.

Geezer

Geezer

11 months 3 weeks ago

yet, I understand how much a father means to the family., and the thought that he defended our country makes him all the more noble.
~ Geez.
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