judyanne
judyanne
Feb 27, 2015
This poem is part of the workshop:

Effective Contemporary Pastoral poetry [Let's start]

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My Piece of Heaven (collaborative poem for Pastoral poetry WS)

Poem Body

The busy city street, the quiet country lane
I know which one of these that I would choose
only one conveys me away from cluttered pain
so watch me as I don my walking shoes

As busy buildings fade with each unforced tread
and the raucous noise becomes a freeform mantra
I slowly lose my constant source of dread
and all the world becomes my growing tantra.

Here the wilderness envelopes my mind
I now drift as the oceans quiet waves
all fears of being, I know will be left behind
within my self's frame, caressing new days

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stanza 1 Judy (judyanne)
stanza 2 Jess (weirdelf)
stanza 3 Ian (sparrow)
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About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Comments

Rula

I read Stan's directions wrong. I thought the one who writes the end should send to the stream.
The poem begins, fleshed and ends beautifully.

Let's see what the boss has to say.

Sparrow

It was belts and Braces, I think I may also have posted to stream.
Having just read it again I think the flow was continuous throughout the piece and didn't lose any of the original theme, and the Pastoral effect was well balanced.
Most of the ones I have read here are doing very well with seamless joins,
Yours Ian

judyanne

He wrote for the person who 'furnished the beginning' to post....- lol sparrow was also short-sighted and obviously read 'furbished' as 'finished'

He and Jess and I thank you for the kind comment
Love judy
xxx

S

I've seen a lot of collaborative poems over the last 6-8 year but this shop has displayed about the smoothest ones as far as transition from one poet to another that I can recall. Kudos to all

weirdelf

I suspect respect. This says something about the Pastoral theme in general. No matter how 'cityfied' we are our feelings about nature are deep and personal and everyone treated each other's submissions with real respect.

Thank you, Judyanne and Ian.