RHYME PATTERNS (part 1) let's begin

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Now (Rhyming Patterns workshop revision 1)

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Now (Rhyming Patterns workshop revision 1 Ron BlueDemon77)

A Rhyme pattern workshop it is indeed
to help us to germinate a small seed
to guage precision when limits are set
it can help this poem, many more yet!

A classroom, a guideline for each of us
meant as a forum where we can discuss
form poems that teach us disciplined craft
free style is still there the classicist laughed

writers in search of the flawless next word
will find themselves here in flight like a bird
If a runner wears weights muscles gain strength
poetry with a scalpel not a monkey wrench
Just a reply, Yours Ron BlueD

or if you're right..Ian

A rhyming place for all to see
To see if we can write in rhyme
especially made for you and me
I hope my entry is in time

Run by Stan the So and so
but give your best so you can see
This is a workshop you all know
What's Rhyme to do with poetry.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: My version, then a second version cross-pollinated between Ian's idea and my own. Personally, I like mine better...hehe. Ron

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Columbus, Ohio, USA

Favorite Poets: Rimbaud, Coleridge, Sylvia Plath, Robert Lowell, Allen Ginsberg, Ai, Langston Hughes, Maxine Kumin, Anne Sexton, Kerouac, Burroughs, Amiri Baraka, Wallace Stevens.

Comments

hello

Hmmm.....The longer lines help offset the propensity for the aabb pattern to be as SS as it usually. But you left out the part where I'm called names lol.................stan

HaHa! Stan!

I promise it will not happen again!.....lol

Ron

Blue Demon77

Ron

Yep your revision of my poem or skit as I will call it is great..
I will need to talk to that task master Stan about what we were supposed to do..
My first ditty was AABB and i was under the impression that the next stage was a rewrite using a changed pattern, Then a rewrite of the whole thing...
My original being:-

A rhyming place for all to see
Especially made for you and me
To see if we can write in rhyme
I hope my entry is in time

This is a workshop you all know
Run by Stan the so and so
But give your best so we can see
What's rhyme to do with poetry

Just a thought, Yours Ian.T

Then the change I gave you now the word change to make it a better piece lol...
I wonder who is write/right Right ?????, Yours Ian.T

Not Sure!

I didn't see anything that specific in the syllabus. My own write for this had five distinct drafts, one of which I did the five stanzas as tri-dactyl meter, iambic triameter, iambic tetrameter, and iambic pentameter.

Ron

Well done and witty

good rhyme too.

But may I suggest that in workshops you actually try to write a poem. Self-reflexiviity has always shat me to tears.