Poem Body
Oh! The duke of Albany,
he had ten thousand men
he marched them to the top of a hill,
then he marched them down again.
Then when they were up, one day
he marched them even more,
He kept them going and didn’t stop
‘til their feet were blistered sore.
He led his army forces
and set out for a quay,
wearing battle boots and crimson coats,
and shipped them over sea.
He took his troops to Holland
to neutralize its fleet
but his soldiers died in Castricum,
so he pulled back in retreat.
They fought, alongside Russians
In rancid filth and gore,
deceased in seventeen ninety nine
In the brutal bloody war.
So the duke of Albany,
he lost ten thousand men,
for when he led them over the hill
they never came back again.
Comments
Mand
The first stanza is as the original which to me is a non, as you are rewriting the poem/Nursery Rhyme then just a ref in the footnotes would be OK.
Your story of an historic event that is told to the children in rhyme is good, I would like to see just the skeleton of the original in there.
Even the Duke of Dork making many errors would bring a great smile to the children who read it, it is now a grownups piece LOL
I re-streamed "As You Grow" this one also has Welsh connections,
and poor Digit has been put on hold for a while I just wonder if he is thinking of a holinight abroad for a month or two ???
Have a lovely day, Yours Ian.T
Thanks Ian
It's always good to hear other peoples points of view. Not sure I have the skill to change this one - I'll have to see. Lol Poor Digit - he's been working so hard he probably needs to recharge his batteries. I'm sure he'll make up for lost time when he gets back. He he
Thanks for dropping by to read and comment.
Love Mand xxxxx
Mand
No wonder this duke of whatever lost so many men .
In the first stanza he was Albany then the duke of York again.
Still the work, as his war, must go on as I do some times
But it is because I is older, and have heard all these nursery rhymes.
Of late we have had a few, I struggled with a crooked man
Then someone else with Black riding Hood got in a jam.
Now the Duke and the demise of his his ten thousand men
Maybe we should make new ones up and put to pen.
La La Have a lovely day out there, you know I care, Yours Ian.T
Thanks for your input Ian.
Thanks for your input Ian. Nice of you to drop by to read and comment. Have a nice day. I'll be by later to catch up on your work.
Keep safe
Loads of love - Mand xxxxx
I would,
I would leave it just as it is, it shows how they thought of wars back then. Especially how little they thought of working people, who'm they forced into service of the crown. And how inept those idiots from the upper echelons were, who sent men to their deaths, while it was not allowed to target officers. Love Roscoe...
Hi Roscoe
Roscoe. I breathed a sigh of relief when i read your comment, I was having problems in trying to think of ways to change the begining and end. You have hit on the button the reason why I updated the old nursry rhyme - I hope it dosen't offend to many people. But I'm glad, at least, that you liked it the way it is. So I really appreciate you coming by to read and express your opinion - having said that I will take on board what Ian says, but I'll wait and see what others think - if any more come to to comment that is. Lol