judyanne
judyanne
Dec 14, 2012
This poem is part of the workshop:

fixed verse – it's not a curse

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in a pocketful of dreams

Poem Body

around her finger lies a rainbow's vow
that promised her a silvery-golden moon
still, after all the years spent, even now
around her finger lies a rainbow's vow
bestowed by one in history kept, somehow
within a telegram's curt words of doom
around her finger lies a rainbow's vow
that promised her a silvery-golden moon

and cherished in a pocketful of dreams
are golden traces back, with silver threads
the amber, for remembered loves it gleams
all cherished in a pocketful of dreams
and pearly strands with spirit stream moonbeams
to shimmer brightly over past foot-treads
all cherished in a pocketful of dreams
are golden traces back, with silver threads
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About This Poem

Last Few Words: triolets

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Comments

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 4 months ago

Beautiful words, the sequence lost me though, was there a purpose to the changes you made of the repetition??
The message of the word of loss, was plain to see, Yours Ian.T

judyanne

i'm not sure where you think i have made changes to the repetition - except for the words 'and' and 'all' being interchanged in the repeating line in the second stanza - and that was merely an attempt to join the thoughts of the two stanzas

thank again
love judy
xxx