Poem Body
I've soaked my pen with wordplay,
Searching more lines to make my way,
If i don't have all it takes to be refine,
Then how far will i progress and fine?
Searching more lines to make my way,
In the spiritual path of all literary bay,
Demands a still silence of poet's gray,
Either day or night, he writes or say.
If i don't have all it takes to be refine,
Those readings may loose and deline,
Mostly, i study between five or nine,
Praying for heavenly hand of divine.
Then how far will i progress and fine,
When there is no decorum to dine?
The bliss of the moment of my time,
Is engrafted from a realm of a clime.
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "The Poet's Pen" explores the journey of a poet in search of refinement and progress. The repetition of the line "Searching more lines to make my way" creates a sense of determination and perseverance. The poem also touches upon the importance of silence and introspection in the creative process.
One suggestion for improvement is to work on the consistency of the rhyme scheme. In the first stanza, the rhyme scheme is AABB, while in the second stanza, it changes to ABAB. It would be beneficial to maintain a consistent rhyme scheme throughout the poem to create a more cohesive structure.
Additionally, some of the phrases and expressions could be refined to enhance the clarity and impact of the poem. For example, the line "If i don't have all it takes to be refine" could be revised to "If I lack the refinement required." This modification would make the line more concise and easier to understand.
Furthermore, the poem could benefit from further exploration of the theme. While the poem touches
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