PROCRASTINATE

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "PROCRASTINATE" demonstrates a strong command of rhyme and rhythm, which effectively contributes to the overall flow and musicality of the piece. The consistent use of the "-ate" rhyme scheme creates a rhythmic pattern that enhances the theme of procrastination, as it gives the impression of a cyclical, unending process.

The poem also effectively uses a variety of verbs to depict the act of procrastination: "contemplate," "ruminate," "fabricate," "deliberate," "complicate," "obfuscate," "exaggerate," and "abdicate." These verbs not only contribute to the rhyme scheme but also add depth to the theme by exploring different aspects of procrastination.

However, the poem could benefit from a clearer development of its ideas. While the verbs used are descriptive and varied, they seem to present a list of actions rather than a progression or narrative. The poem might gain depth and complexity by exploring the consequences of procrastination or the speaker's feelings about it in more detail.

The line "If you were me, we’d abdicate," seems somewhat unclear in its meaning. It might be beneficial to revise this line for clarity, ensuring that it contributes to the overall theme and understanding of the poem.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from the use of more concrete imagery. While the abstract language used is effective in conveying the theme, the inclusion of more specific, tangible images could help to ground the poem and make the experience of procrastination more relatable to the reader.

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Hello, Ruby,
You are so clever. Perfect rhyme without sounding forced or illogical - and fun!
Thank you!
L

no problems with the language and structure
but, the line; "in clarity, I never wait" doesn't make sense,
unless you are trying to communicate the opposite meaning;
that you don't really procrastinate. I would have said, [always]
instead of [never]; and "I [won't] exaggerate".

Or do I have it wrong? ~ Geez.
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Hello Ruby.

"In clarity, I never wait" makes perfect sense to me, which might say something about me. To me it is saying that when it come to trying to see things clearly, I never hesitate to make a decision or observation. Personally, I would keep the line.

Thoroughly enjoyed the poem, it was a fun read.

Best wishes for a wonderful Christmas. - Will

I like this as much as I liked the first one. [I would get rid of the [defer] in the last line,] to make the meter smoother.
I guess, you're going to say, "Is that guy ever satisfied?" Yeah, sometimes. LoL
~ Geez.
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I love your use of rhyming words in this, all referring to hesitation and negative actions. My favourite line is "If you were I, we'd delegate". Perhaps you are suggesting a lack of assertiveness and having someone else give you a task to do or a role because you (or the fictional person) do not have the ability to make the decision and be forthright so you (they) remain passive.

Neopoet has misunderstood the use of 'abdicate' in your poem but this particular word means to resign a post, similar to saying that a queen is abdicating her throne. To give something up or to retire.