lou
lou
Oct 29, 2010

PSEUDO

Poem Body

You’re a pseudo hero
a counterfeit lover
meagre soul undercover
the antagonist who enchants
in a mock romance.

You’re an apocryphal fool
playing the game of chance
fallacious in his charm.
delusive creature quick to abuse.
impassioned women are misused.

An imaginary Don Juan,
a bogus Casanova.
a quasi member of the human race,
you’re disgrace.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

mona

mona

14 years 6 months ago

you are a real great poet.

woow
amazing, and I really mean it.

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lou

lou

14 years 6 months ago

thanks shirl me girl

lou

lou

14 years 6 months ago

thanks xena

lou

Z

ziggy

14 years 6 months ago

hi there louise this is strong I don't understand this completly but thats my fault lol
you can explain it to me when we chat hope your well ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x
the first stanza is my fav its brill

lou

Awww thanks mate , I'll explain it to ya lol

Lou

judyanne

did you mean 'you're A disgrace' for your last line?

love judy
xxxx

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 5 months ago

I was privy to this one before you posted it and I have to say this one grows on you. The first time you sent it to me, it was ok, but i wasn't dragged into it. I have read it maybe ten times since that first read and it gets better with each read...it is fast becoming one of my favourites of yours.

I also know a little of what inspired this write and you have hooked it perfectly!

you ain't 'alf bad ya know!

HS

lou

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Thank you , your comments mean a lot to me.

Lou

CCfire

of some of the jerks on the 'other' site I used to be on lol..this is strong writing with a vivid message, some people need their butt kicked from here to sunday. Great write. :)

lou

There are way too many men like this, but I think there are a few that are not lol

Thank you for reading.

Lou

Z

this reads good this wordy piece
"You’re a pseudo hero
a counterfeit lover
meagre soul undercover
the antagonist who enchants
in a mock romance." like them lines for sure
up there with your best I reckon ,,,,,,,,,ziggy x

Eduardo Cruz

WOW, talk about a punch in the face!
great, now one to the gut just because...
Eddie

lou

Thank you, but not sure why you feel it's specious.

Lou

RoseBlack

I love the language and the whole premise of the poem. I am familiar with such fake Don Juan's. Your poem summed it up perfectly.