The Rapids (Tanka)

Poem Body

somewhere down the stream
bubbles of my liquid desire
become gentle waves

while sounds of ecstatic throes
vanish in the aftermath.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

dear raj,

a beautiful and exquisite moment to be cherished...I love your descriptive way with words. sublime.

*hugs, Cat
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Thanks dear Cat

appreciate your visit to my page and for your appreciative comment..

much love and hugs...

HI Teddy

Thanks for your comment ...good to know your found it gorgeous..

Lovely poem, raj. My thoughts

Lovely poem, raj. My thoughts are the same as Teddy's and Cat's. What is the name of this Eastern form?
Enjoyed, Gracy

Hi Gracy

thanks for taking time to read and comment...

Name of this eastern form is Tanka...i am copying below from google what Tanka form is

How to Write a Tanka Poem. Tanka poems follow a set of rules. They all have five lines and each line follows a pattern: the first line has five syllables, the second line has seven syllables, the third line has five syllables, the fourth line has seven syllables, and the fifth line has seven syllables.

hope the above helps clarify your query..

thanks again..

Raj

subtle is the one word that comes to me as I think I am coming away with aa difeent thought

Hi Chrys

thanks for your comment...good to know you liked it,...you said "I am coming away with a different thought"...curious to know what it is...

be well..

The Rapids

Hi, raj,
I think Chrys and I are possibly interpreting this the same way. For me, this is subtle - and almost perfect in its energy. Very nice.
Thank you!
L

Het raj

A lot said and perhaps even more implied with just a few lines

Hi Stan

thanks for reading and your comment...

be well ..stay safe dear friend...