THE RED LIGHT OF CONSENT

Poem Body

The modern-day floozy and bawd,
Isn’t working for your cheers nor applause.
Like a fractured mirror exposes her situation,
Whatever name she uses, false information.

Betty didn’t want to be a harlot or a floozy,
And her life is far removed from that movie.
A Pretty Woman before she turned to the trade,
Betty services men in order to get paid.

Her beautiful little dumplings start to sag,
And the customers want to pay less for a shag.
When they say the oldest profession does no harm,
With Betty’s history this raises the alarm.

Are sex workers only there to serve for pleasure?
Why did Madame Sin become a national treasure?
And how did we learn of her misfortune and her tales,
Salacious details, large print headlines, for paper sales.

If I could liberate exploited women,
I’d help them make a choice on their decision.
I’d start with teaching them with what they’re worth,
And prove they’re not defined by a fate of birth.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Betty's continued tale.

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: I like Margaret Atwoods poetry and I enjoy her writing. She has a natural ability to make her fiction read like poetry, if you read closely you will see it., I have a good understanding of the English language but I don't always follow the rules as I can be a little lazy and sometimes I'm just tired., I've been inspired reading the poetry on Neopoet and have enjoyed analysing other people's work.

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I think...

there is a glitch that should be taken care of soon. ~ Geezer.
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I guess...

that the main thing I wanted to comment on, is that you could
pretty this up and make it sound smoother. You could do it by shortening many of the lines
and by leaving out some of the descriptive words to make the meter better, but I think that it would lose some of its
appeal and the story would suffer. So, I say that the scenery that is envisioned, the story that is told
is just right. Great job of asking the right questions. ~ Geez.
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Thanks Geezer, I can see what

Thanks Geezer, I can see what you're saying and I'll take another look later today. As it's a new venture/subject for me, I love the words you chose; scenery and envisioned. Thank you so much for your input, I have a few areas that I can work on now. Ruby :)

I really like this

A lot. This is such a great topic to write about as it doesn't seem talked about often. Many are quick to judge but don't really know their situation. Good job!

Thank you Rose. I'm going to

Thank you Rose. I'm going to do a third one so it's a series but I want to let my thoughts stew before hand. Your comments, as always much appreciated. Take care Ruby :)