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reflecting on how fleeting is this life

Poem Body

with thoughts of they who have left
reaction's mixed

time
has made it seem alright
despite remembering
the anguish
of bereft
and realisation they'd write on my page
no more

I’ve intuition
they have found new light
acceptance has insidiously crept
into my existence
with setting suns

but sometimes
my innate beliefs take flight
excruciatingly expose regret

a deep 'I miss you'
hollow
in my chest

as I acknowledge
it is too late
to tell them
to know them I was blessed
.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Comments

Dear Judd

I cant offer you anything constructive for this poem its painfully sad its just my take

time
has made it seem alright
despite remembering
the anguish
of bereft
and realisation they'd write on my page
no more

I’ve intuition
they've found new light
acceptance has insidiously crept
into my existence
with setting suns

my favourite Stanza's

love n hugs JC xxx

thanks very much jc

for the very kind comment
love judd
xxx

Hi Judy

we run about in diapers..blink..then we're in school..blink...next comes marriage...blink...then the passing of friends and family...blink...until those remembered outnumber those known...blink...at last the hoped for reuniting on that other plane.
line 7...maybe berievement instead of bereft?...................stan

hi stan

thanks for the read, comments and suggestion
- i prefer 'bereft' to 'bereavement' - one is an emotion the other a state ...

love judy
xxx