The summer sun had set, the stars filled up the sky.
They sat out on the front porch, he asked the reasons why.
“I think it’s best” was her reply, “There’s nothing more to say.”
“We’ve talked about this all day long, there’s just no other way...”
Egos bruised and feelings hurt when everything goes wrong,
The good times seemed so very short, the bad times too damn long...
With that he walked away, to where he didn’t know,
But tomorrow he will pack a bag, get on a bus and go...
Two years went by, she realized she had come to regret it,
She tried to get him back again, he smiled and said, “Forget it”.
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Regrets" effectively captures the emotions of regret, heartbreak, and reflection through its narrative structure. The use of dialogue between the characters adds depth to the story and helps convey their conflicting emotions. The imagery of the summer setting and the stars in the sky sets a poignant backdrop for the unfolding events.
One suggestion for improvement would be to explore more vivid and sensory language to enhance the reader's experience. Descriptive details about the setting, characters' emotions, and actions can create a more immersive atmosphere and evoke stronger emotions in the reader. Additionally, consider varying the rhythm and meter of the poem to create more dynamic pacing and add emphasis to key moments in the narrative.
Overall, "Regrets" is a poignant exploration of love, loss, and the consequences of decisions made in the heat of the moment. With some enhancements in descriptive language and poetic techniques, the poem has the potential to resonate even more deeply with readers.
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Stevo
Very sad, but very well written!
Thank you
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