mand
mand
Oct 14, 2013
This poem is part of the workshop:

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Second attempt at Dactylic

Poem Body

Boy, is it hard to be writing a verse like this.

Patiently presenting amazing story lines.

Perhaps I should be more careful and listen more.

after all writing is funny and exciting.

 

BOY, is it / HARD to be / WRIT..ing..a / VERSE like this.

PA..tient..ly / PRE..sen..ting / AMA..z..ing / STOR..y lines.

PER..haps I / SHOULD be more / CAR..ful and / LIST..en more.

AFTER all / WRIT..ing is / FUN..ny and / EX..cit..ing.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: GBR

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Rula

Rula

11 years 6 months ago

on this dear Mand.
As I see it, it is perfect.
The last line reads

AFT-er- all / WRIT..ing is / FUN..ny and / EX..cit..ing.

Have you given the anapastic any attempt yet?