judyanne

Nov 04, 2010

sorry Louise

Poem Body

Dammit you know they have not yet arrived.
It’s still only Louise and me I stress.
The selfish bitch won’t advise the triad
where I have moved to and my new address.
And all day all I do is think in rhyme.
There’s no-one here to counter-act her style
Louise just gets her way now all the time.
I give her a damn inch she takes a mile.
But just as I’m about to do her in
I look back at what we have been writing.
Something we’ve done catches my attention.
With Louise I am no longer fighting.
‘Tho I will check with my good friend Robert
I think we just wrote a perfect sonnet.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: some may remember louise - my rhyming muse....

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

More from this author

Comments

LOL

You desribe most succinctly why I have, with one on-going exception, never indulged in a collaberation!

hi jim

thank you
collaberation works well in my household when everyone's here.
when it's just louise all i hear is rhyme....

i presume your wife is your exception?

lol
judy
xxxx

xxxxx

i would never dare call my louise lou....
(and don't tell her, but she's no-where near as good as our lou)

love and hugs
judd
xxxx

Jude

My name is Louise and at first I thought you were attacking me LMAO.

A nice approach to the description of the struggle for inspiration.

Love Lou xx

i know

you took a back flip with my other poem about louise too
rotflmao
i'd never call you a bitch, i like you too much....

thanks for the supportive comment
love
judy
xxxx

Hehe

Thanks jude

Love Lou xx

rotflmao

so glad you remembered who louise is....
i wondered if i should re-submit my other poem about her again before this, but thought it a waste of people's time as it has already been critiqued...

love to you ss
and lots of huggles across that big desert
judd
xxxx

Jc

I wasn't worried lol

Lou xx

so happy i made you smile shirl

so glad you enjoyed it
as for liking louise - you can have her if you want... (smile)
(louise did help with the dunny poem, but the tacky one keeps trying to change it)
love judy
xxx

hi rosina

thank you
glad you enjoyed it

i guess sonnets aren't so boring
- not that you've ever said they are....
i'm referring to what seems to be the general consensis that they're out of fashion at the moment

love judy
xxxx

A

Yes, I acknowledge Louise has

Yes, I acknowledge Louise has played an important role. Enjoyed this novelty, Judy.
Regards
Ayaz

thanks ayaz

i'm so glad that you enjoyed this.
love
judy
xxxx