Poem Body
Electromagnetic energy replete in heat not light
encompasses as a hot blanket as gravity is fought.
Heat rises and the stone awaits its fury.
Time, pressure and heat are all.
Jun 28, 2017
Stone stanza (Imagery workshop)
About This Poem
Last Few Words: What in the hell is indirect imagery?
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
I see those"last few words"
Now you are just trying to aggravate me lol. In you example you have used metaphor to suppy images which can be interpreted more ways than one. Fighting gravity... this leaves the reader to decide how it's fought. this is indirect or unspoken imagery.
Let me give another example. You might want to describe a hollow which at one time was inhabited but is now empty of people = "where none go NOW but hare and deer"....this help any?
I thought
We need to use the same line we used in the first exercise.
No
I'm trying to leave more freedom of expression for those having trouble with this
Obviously...
I don't know what I'm about. I am dreadfully confused.
If this is
what I think, it is a pure scientific little piece.
I can't say that I have fully got the image but thought it's all a direct one and has very little indirect imagery.
Let's see what the boss and others might say.