It didn’t take me long after leaving Creel behind
I eavesdropped at a few partly open hotel doors
yeah waited a while and watched for a host
to take me to America's wildest shores,
Ah! A rich man and his sweetest whore
I imagined I’d like to join in the fun
I entered the richest bum, as he played his game
his eyes turned bloody red not seen before
by the woman of the street, dirty littlest whore.
She gasped as if she reached her orgasmic heights
t'was the only energy and the way of Mog’s nights
he could last for hours and hours but time was no more
the woman screamed and ran naked out of the door.
Richard Dean was aghast, he hadn't realized what was going on
his inner coolest peace by now had been erased
as his trip to the Americas was early next day
to the port by carriage he quickly made his way.
well I bid you all a very fine, fare ye well,
yeah, the Dean had arranged passage with a spritlily gal
so naturally off I went to meet my companion for the voyage
I hope that by now you can clear up the carnage,
Comments
Number 26
Now we have the full rundown of what happened to Mog and that he /she has left.
All we need now is for the Wesley and the last few writes to tell us what happens to Creel and if the police find their man.
Good write there young Bard and it fits well.
Just now have to wait for the summary and closure, I think that there are three of our poets going for closure.
I wonder what they will blame, Creel will be near mad by now.
Will he find Mackwill's body before the police just watch this space
Yours as always Ian.T
wow
where is the big guy
let me to WS....
and you bow
somehow....
loved
Its not that this is a bad poem but I was hoping for Mog's tale to have ended already. Otherwise if the others all write about Mog, it will be difficult for those who are writing the epilogue. There are still other characters' stories who needed to be told, like Mackwill's wife, the other witness millie and Urilla.
One more thing, loved, if you are posting your poems to a workshop, I just want to remind you to scroll down after you have finished creating them and choose the workshop section, otherwise, they won't appear in the workshop page itself and we might miss posting our feedbacks and critiques for your contributions.
Alid
this scrolling stuff i can't understand
hence i have posted here
is it wrong???
please tell ws to read it or i will pm it
yes when we have a dozen minds the end has to be dozens plus hahahaaa
Loved
Nicely written
Thanks
Barbara glad u liked it hope ws will also
this is a good poem
how close are we to being able to write our epilogues? there has been a lot going on at home so I haven't been on as much. if someone could please bring me up to speed. thanks
Carrie
The epilogues can be written at the weekend as the resolution, should be completed by then, and all that needs to be done will be the three of you to do the epilogues.
This has been a complex write with six or seven different writers joining in a continuous stream of a story, hope I can do the Resolution OK, I shall write t in the morning as time is few tonight..
Yours as always Ian xx
You are the man.
I'm exhausted and I thank you for covering for me. The electric company is about to shut me down for a few days for maintenance and maybe again next week, so I may be hit and miss for a bit. I will be here as they let me.
Thank you Ian, for everything throughout the workshop. You were a bulwark of imagination when mine was running dry.
There is a resolution to be written.
I had originally planned to write it myself, but since Ian has such a grasp of the storyline I have asked him (I hope nicely enough) to write the resolution for me. I think he is much better prepared to do so. I'm waiting for him to say yay or nay. If he doesn't want the responsibility, then I will write the resolution. It should not interfere with anyone's epilogue. They should be completely separate works dealing with a perspective drawn up by the author. They need not compliment one another, so there is no reason not to begin work on them and even post them. The resolution will simply bring the loose ends together into a cohesive whole.
Write them and post them.
I will post this comment on the syllabus page now.
By the way loved
I've checked "eavesdrop" is supposed to be one word.
Alid
so be it
I can't object can I?