Poem Body
sketches
created
on memo pad
measured
cut pieces
sewn together
wonder
if the suit
is aesthetic
i love
adventure
not barriers
my brand
is free spirit
flowing like ink
I count
all stitches
holding pieces
leaving
enough room
to imagine
each suit
I design
reflects my mood
a need
turns to want
then a desire
Comments
Hm, interesting poem.
Hm, interesting poem.
Yes, I see it relates to the topic.
Well done :)
Thanks for your reading and
Thanks for your reading and positive comment IRiz. Means a lot.
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Hi Raj
a need
turns to want
then a desire
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While I enjoy this piece Their sequence seems like a de-escalation as need remains more urgent than desire. What if it where reversed
a want
turns to desire
then urgency of need
Does this end stronger?
and what is Sanku? Is it Hindi or perhaps Sanskrit?
Thanks Zebra
for reading and sharing your thoughts...actually need-want-desire are known to be progressive stages of a sales cycle ...or decision making progression...
as to Sunku ...it is an innovation of IRiz as a japanese concise form....3 stanzas...each of three lines in a sequence of 2-3-4 syllables.... i will search and add a link which will make you understand it better...here it is..
https://www.neopoet.com/iriz/blog/mon-2018-02-19-1013
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