Poem Body
Basghetti is fun
But I like to eat lompster
And play with arbles.
Dec 22, 2010
Things Children Say!
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Cute :-)
I liked it! A haiku is supposed to be about nature. This one would qualify as a senryu which has the same syllable requirements a haiku has, but is about human nature.
He he
I used to get my son to say "Hello daddy pineapple, warthog head Newman". Cos it cracked me up every time he said it . Ha ha
They can be so funny!!
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
Ahh yes a senryu!!!
Love Mand xxxxxxx
LOL!!!
Spell check comes in very handy!! I'm always using it. Sometimes spelling a nerd wrong can be hilarious, Ha ha
Thanx for reading and commenting! I think we need something to laugh about in this weather!!
Loads of love
Mand xxxxxxxx
Ha ha ha
That is soo funny, I can't stop laughing!! That would make a funny poem.
Brilliant!!
Spidiate dogs spidiate dogs
We howled as we slammed through the
swing doors to the hall, hundreds of times.
Mummy sleeve me..
Where's my Home guardigan!(Daddy in the Home Guard)
Will be back Mand,
luv as aye Ann
Ha ha
How often they make us laugh ... I knew a little girl who couldn't sound her C's. "Daddy tan I have a tuddle"! Sooo cute.
Those days fly past - but we keep the memories and smile.
Thank you for sharing your little gems.
Loads of love
Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Ha ha!
Made me laugh! Lolly - seems a good name for someone so sweet! BABA. He he and Shitley!! ha ha!!
What is so good is that it's all said in innocence and comes out spontaneously - precious moments.
Thanx for reading and commenting, sweet Lolly!!
Love and hugs
Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
My daughter who started
My daughter who started talking when she was 8 or 9 months old said her mommy liked foffee, her friend had a wheeawheea (VW), she liked spusghetti and she loved her aminals. (she argued it was aminals until she finally couldn't argue with her kindergarten teacher). My son didn't start talking till he was almost 3 and then it was dissertations of q's an a's. He'd been saving up.
Thanks Mand, Barry and I were just talking about this last night. I love these memories so very much.
Hugs,
Anna
Foffee!! ha ha
Spusghetti - ha ha ( I think I'm going to have a heart attack - laughing so much ). Soo funny.
Great fun! I've really enjoyed hearing about everyone's experiences - Thank you for sharing your memories and reading and commenting.
Loads of love
Mand xxxxxxxxx
kids
Don't know if ya'll have polk berries there but my oldest son used to call them polka berries........stan
Ha ha!!
Polka berries - bet you smiled every time he said that! Ha ha
As adults we often correct children when they pronounce something wrong - but I think it's worth leaving it for a while, cos they soon grown out of it and then it's gone. ( If that makes sense )
Thanks Stan, nice to see yah
Love to you and Susan.
Mand xxxxxxxx
You are so right
If someone hasn't already - someone should write a book or long poem about it. It would be brilliant and what a good idea to capture the moment, put it to a poem and add it to a baby album!!
Thank you for coming by to read and comment.
Love and hugs
Mand xxxxxx