Poem Body
Darkness calls to darkness,
Whilst death calls to death.
Another one falls helpless
And I steal a last man’s breath.
One more visit left to pay
Scrooge—a man without a heart
He will be freed this very day
If he but does his part.
Cowardly, he hides
Beneath his bed and I
Slip into his room
And take him where he lies.
He protests, and he cries
But not a word says I;
I drag him to my side,
To see where he will die.
He stares in trembling confusion,
While I loom behind his back.
Gravediggers in bored collusion
Mark the stone—reveal his lack.
What is this? He asks,
But I make no reply.
He leans closer; I push him in
He screams when he thinks he’ll die.
Comments
I like...
your sense of humor! I think that you will fit in here just fine! Glad that you stuck it out and got things straightened out so that you can post. I see that you took my advice on this poem and I am pleased to see that it works a little better. ~ Geezer.
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Dear Geezer,
Yes, thank you so much for the advice! I had to make a new account, but I'm glad things seem to be working now (And I can respond to comments and post outside the blog feature now :D)! I really appreciate your help sorting through this. :)
Not a problem...
It's one of the things that I like most about being an advocate and a greeter/guide. I get to help others enjoy the site as much as I do. I also get to meet people that value my opinions and challenge me to think. I've already said; that I like your attitude and sense of humor and I am looking forward to seeing much more of your work. ~ Geezer.
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Dear Ms. Kareyn
without exaggeration, I enjoyed reading your Third Ghost Story very much.
I found it to be well written and will look forward to seeing more of your work on this site. Yours, Van
Thanks for the kind words!
Thanks for the kind words! Your poetry is amazing as well, and I look forward to seeing more of yours as well!
ooOOoh, I can't wait to see
ooOOoh, I can't wait to see your entry! :D Wishing you all the best, and Merry Christmas!
Dear Teddy,
There we go!
The Third Ghost
Hello, Kareyn,
So very clever! I can't help but wonder if the end will be a bit different from Dickens'! Excellent!
Thank you!
L
I didn't read that I was
I didn't read that I was supposed to give it a modern twist until after I submitted! Oh well, that's a missed opportunity this time, but I'll be sure to read the instructions in full next time! XD
I hope I am not your third ghost
as on another site
I only contests host
but if this maiden poem
as an initial entrance wins
I may believe in the existence of ghosts
then no more contests
I shall Host
won three here almost
Happy be the glory
ms
a shrunken ghost
wishes
I almost hope
I almost hope
I do not win
So you can host
Your contests in
This haunted site!
But thank you for
The warm wishes!
I appreciate
Them more than I
Can say!
Nice piece here
Sometimes the contests have different rules. I blew it on this one too... worked hard to keep mine to 32 lines, and the rules (which I didn’t pay attention to) were for much less.
Welcome to the website, and looking forward to reading more from you!