Poem Body
A girl looks to tomorrow
And she sees pure
Luminescence
No person
More radiate
She will be sunlight
Peaking through
Windows
At the break of the day
And she will no longer
Be the tomb
Of a mother's regrets
No longer the girl
Who sees self love as vanity
achievement as ego
No longer the girl
Who refers to herself
In third person
To escape the feeling
Of being in herself
Tomorrow will be
A better day
Where I will
Have my moment
In the sun.
Comments
Second stanza
Masterpiece. That second stanza! Wow! I love, it love, it love it!
Tim
Thank you!
Thank you!
hello,
I agree with Tim! my favorite lines are:
And she will no longer
Be the tomb
Of a mother's regrets
that just says so very much! incredible!
*hugs, Cat
Yes!!!
I want to write
…and he will no longer
be the tomb
of a mother’s regrets.
On a little scrap of paper and pin it to my computer monitor. That’s brilliantly said.
So much this!!
I love this comment so much.
I love this comment so much. Thank you.
Dear Abby
First of all Hello, I don't think I've read your poetry before but this is brilliant, that second stanza has already been mentioned it's a cracking piece of writing.
Thoroughly enjoyed your poem. Lovely to meet you and find your work I will be sure to keep an eye out for you.
Kind regards Seren/Jayne-Chloe
thank you for commenting. I
thank you for commenting. I appreciate it, and I'm glad you liked the poem!
Great poem
My favorite line...'Tomorrow will be
A better day
Where I will
Have my moment
In the sun.'
Everyone is optimism that tomorrow will be fine.