Idle Time Poetry

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Truth Or Consequences... [Idle Time Workshop]

Poem Body

Shall I tell the truth
what would you like to hear?
I'll tell you a bedtime story
allay your greatest fear

The notion that the truth
is always better than a lie
It might be truth itself
but, even so, you'll cry

Why did you wait to ask me
what my intentions were?
Could it be you didn't care
while I was rubbing fur?

I don't want to cause you sorrow
or ruin the make-up on your eyes
Smear the blush or muss your hair
soooo just a little lie

Damn, it's hard to speak
I can't make up my mind
The inner war is being fought
Truth... or should I be kind?

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

Hi Gee

Good to read this...nothing specific to critique about right now..

be well...

Good title, Geez, and the content is so "true"...lol. The truth is often hard to tell, but usually it's best. Nowadays, doctors tell their patients exactly what they have and an estimate of how long they'll live.
Good rhymes throughout. A painfull tale deftly written. All the best, Gracy

I figured...

there were some that would understand where this was coming from and you would be amongst them. Yeah, the doctors are giving people the truth these days; but I guess that probably stems from wanting their patients to take better care of themselves, not to think that no matter what they do, they still have the same amount of time. Thanks for stopping by,~ Geez.
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Gee

This is incredible work
I was glued to every word but why should this bring sadness yet it does
excellent writing I do believe you have outdone yourself with this one

Thank you...

for your too kind remarks. I don't feel that this is some of my best work, but it sure does me good to hear that you enjoyed it.
~ Gee.
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Hi Gee

Truth of pretty lies.... a decision made every day by most people. Only suggestion I have for you to consider is to add either Hard or Cruel a t the beginning of last line.....stan

I tried your suggestion...

of either Hard or Cruel at the beginning of the last line and it just ruined the meter. I will keep thinking about it though. ~ Gee.
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have faith you can figure it out

Truth or Consequences

Hi, Geezer,
Tough question, indeed. I've (almost) always thought that the truth is better in the end, but a white lie told in a tender moment has its value. My late husband used to tell me that I could do no wrong... sweet little lie it was! Usually the person being lied to knows the reality any way, but may appreciate the effort for comfort...dunno. Very good poem without a sure-fire answer and definitely an inner war!
Thank you!
L