Walk-In-Closet (Ghost at 2714 Girard Ave. N.)

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively utilizes imagery to establish a haunting atmosphere and convey a sense of unease. The detailed description of the figure in the photographs, particularly the focus on the eyes, creates a vivid and unsettling image that serves to engage the reader's imagination.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of rhythm and meter. The varying line lengths and inconsistent rhythm can disrupt the flow of the poem and distract from the narrative. By refining the rhythm and meter, the poem could achieve a more cohesive and immersive reading experience.

The use of parentheses in the line "maybe in a long past life?" is somewhat jarring and interrupts the tone of the poem. It might be more effective to integrate this idea into the poem more seamlessly, perhaps by rephrasing or repositioning this line.

The final line of the poem introduces a twist that deepens the mystery and intrigue of the narrative. However, the use of an exclamation mark might be seen as overly dramatic and could potentially detract from the impact of this revelation. A more subtle punctuation choice could allow the reader to absorb this information more naturally, enhancing the overall effect of the poem.

Lastly, the poem could explore the emotional response of the speaker in greater depth. While the poem does convey a sense of fear and unease, further exploration of the speaker's feelings and reactions could add another layer of complexity to the poem and further engage the reader's empathy.

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Howdy Cat.

I like the poem BUT, I have no intention of heading towards 2714 Girard St. Not no but, Hell no.

Best wishes, Will

Hi Cat, I liked the unusual setting used for the poem and the descriptions of clothing. As it is a real life experience, the title is appropriate. The mysterious elements of the poem and the emotional intensity gives it a real moody sensation. I have to say you've created an intriguing and unique experience for this reader. Thank you, Ruby :) xx

Was this ghost one of the worst that you've experienced? I know that there are others. This one reminded me a bit of the main villain in "Phantasm". Very scary. Glad that I never lived there.

Really liked this stanza:

This figure centered in the shot.
Eyes focused and keenly hateful,
His vision, direct, striking!
obscenity and rage seeming fateful
sent directly to me.

I was wondering about the ghost, was he a real part of your life?

Very nicely written.