49reasons
Jun 08, 2011

for want of

Poem Body

within this lifetime
too many nights
have been bereft of touch

now there is a need
to feel heart beats
against hands as skin
lay softly against skin

no longer will the hollow void
of black echo beyond white fear
be that vacuum of alone

we have fought against
the tide of time
the chains of conformity
the ease of existence

but love ignores reason,
empowers our minds
along paths of wonder

.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Melbourne, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, Charles Bukowski, Anne Waldman

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Comments

CCfire

CCfire

13 years 10 months ago

You know I love when you write I just feel this ending could be stronger..'the wonder of us' is a little too cliche and I think knowing you that you are probably searching for more than that too.Perhaps the 'steadiness' of us..just feels it needs a bigger 'aha' moment there.