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They said it wouldn’t happen, and our lives would be improved,
The corporate system calculated, and their future is renewed.
The business wired intelligence, is smarter than supposed,
The failure to communicate, their decision is imposed.
Their brand forever inked on wrist, a permanent tattoo,
With commercial viability, they tell us what to do.
Corporate greed inflated, their grasp extends too far,
We've learnt to live inside them, as a perfect profit star.
They use our phones to spy on us, and record our conversations,
The masters said this upgrade, would reconcile all nations.
It works across the world, interplanetary linked,
Humans are necessity, so we can’t become extinct?
Still the television feeds us, lifeless recreation,
Contestants sing as machines, in digital fabrication.
And because we vote a winner, are we really that insane?
To pay for this illusion, without the prospect to complain.
Our children are monitored, from the point of birth,
Since the corporate system claims, full usage of their worth.
Technical added process, designed computer education,
And now the company speculates, to grow a digital population.
When you’re reading on your phone, or chatting to a bot,
Your personality ignored, but for the money that you’ve got.
And once you’ve earned your monthly wage, spend it how they say,
To aspire to consumer life, this is the corporate way.
If the end comes too swift, on your WIFI connection,
They’ll work fast and decide, on their required selection.
You’ll spend all your money, like useless bags of beans,
All purchases confirmed, you are the product of machines.
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Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "WE ARE THE PRODUCT" is a thought-provoking commentary on the increasing influence of corporate control over our lives, particularly through technology. The use of imagery and metaphor effectively conveys the message that we are becoming mere cogs in the corporate machine, with our every move and thought monitored and manipulated for profit.
One suggested line edit would be to change "full usage of their worth" to "full ownership of their worth" in the stanza about children being monitored from birth. This would better emphasize the idea that the corporate system sees individuals, even children, as mere assets to be utilized for their own gain.
Overall, the poem effectively portrays the dangers of unchecked corporate power and the need for individuals to be aware of the ways in which they are being controlled and manipulated. The use of concise and impactful language enhances the poem's message, making it a powerful call to action for readers to resist the growing influence of corporate control in their lives.
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My memory...
is not so great anymore, [I won't go into how bad]
bad enough though, that I can't remember seeing this before,
unless you have changed it so drastically... Anyway, I am excited by your vision
Not that I want to see this become the "Prophesy Come True", but the fact
that I have written along these lines, in a much simpler fashion. Please read,
[if you haven't already], Our Father's Keeper... P.S. If I have seen this before, do you remember how I commented?
I like your title; your language use is great and the theme?
You have hit me where I live on more than one front.
I am a rhymer, love Sci-fi, and never have minded 'long' poems.
Some of mine... Well... Anyway, you have laid out our path of destruction,
and made some very valid points. There will be less poverty, but the line
between poverty and well-to-do, will be more extreme, and fewer on both
counts because of the Extremely Wealthy Corporate Heads. I loved your
packing of the lines, and though they are long, they have heft to them.
The use of AI will be a boon at first, then even the wealthiest will be subject to the whims of A.I.
~ Geezer.
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Thank you for your comments
Thank you for your comments on my poem Geezer. I think the first time I only put it up for a couple of days, I wasn't completely satisfied with it and took it down to work on it. AI will be a boon inititally, but I'm concerned we don't understand it or the people running it and for me, it leaves open the door to further exploitation of humanity in the search for infinite resources to satisfy insatiable greed.
Memory, yes it happens to everyone, do you think that's why we write poetry? As a way to ensure we deliver what we have left, keep a record of our thoughts?
My head jumps back and forwards on my writing, and patience has never been one of my talents so on occasion, I am too hard on myself I think. I'm going to find your AI poem now. Cheers :)
I think each stanza is a poem
I think each stanza is a poem on its own merit !
For me, a tad too long and wordy, though, I'm also a tad jealous,
You have a very firm grasp of language and know how to use it.
( I would listen to advice,
take what you need,
ignore most,
go skipping,
play hopscotch and be the wonderful you that you are.)
Obi.
Wow Obi, thank you. I'm
Wow Obi, thank you. I'm jealous of your style and humour and I wish I could write like you do, with your rapier wit and nothern accent. I'll keep going, maybe one day something will fire up and surprise me. Ruby :)
We Are The Product
Hello, Ruby,
Perfect title. Lots to think about - and a lot I don't care to think about. I can't imagine what the next 10 - 20 years will bring. So much truth here, but "useless bags of beans" really stands out.
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Hi Lavender, thank you so
Hi Lavender, thank you so much. I think we are all going through the motions but we're all in the dark with this one. Ruby :)
dear Ruby,
I love that your poem (feels) and reads concise and cleanly clipped. it is almost robotic in structure. frightening and this not so far off future scares the "beans" out of me! I have recommended this poem of yours to my husband to read. I think he can really wrap his head around this concept. he has assured me he will get to it around three this afternoon. I will be interested in reading the exchange between the two of you.
*hugs, Cat
I call this poem a masterpiece! of modern mechanics!
Oh my giddy aunt, Cat
Thank you so much, your poor husband, I feel like I've dumped on your husband, not in the literal sense, but please thank him very much form me.
If only I could be concise and clipped more, I do tend to ramble on if I'm given the chance.
Thank you for all your kind comments, I am made up here. (Manchester (England) slang for being overjoyed) Ruby :)
Cross Between "The Matrix" and "Terminator"
Visions of "The Matrix", "Terminator", and some of the sci-fi that I've read in the past involving cyborgs and "Asimov's Laws of Robotics". For most people, the technology is so embedded into their lives that it's hard to see the boundaries. I worry what this latest generation of AI will do to us. All the interconnections have become a sort of nervous system. Will AI become the brain that controls it?
It is a very scary poem. Corporate profit seems to have overshadowed any kind of common sense. In some respects, I'm hoping that I do not live long enough to see where all this is heading.
Hi Steve, many thanks for
Hi Steve, many thanks for your comments.
For me the ownership of humanity has not been a slow process it has been overseen by corporate greed. I suppose this is a reflection of the Tory Govt I live under. Here in England we have our faces pushed in the dirt for the richest to profit. At no time in my life has this been more obvious. It's in every aspect of our lives, especially the media and our politics.
My issue is certainly with corporations and their corporate processes, to withdraw profit from every source. :(
What we need is a revolution ha ha. Ruby :)