Poem Body
we need to believe
we need to be brave
till we lay in the grave;
we need to be strong
when everything's wrong;
we need to believe
so we can live
as we are the kings
of our lives and dreams!
hey, can you hear?
the freedom is near!
so make your choice,
don't hide your voice!
come on, go ahead
but don't lose your head!
Comments
hello Anna,
in this line: and so we can live
take out (and) it is unnecessary and detracts from the poem. otherwise you have a fine poem.
*hugs, Cat
Thank you,Cat. I did what you
Thank you,Cat. I did what you said.Looks better!
I agee with...
Cat, and only have to add, that you have a misspelling in [com'on]. ~ Geezer.
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Thank you.
Thank you.
Wonderful
Apt! So lovely. Very educative and instructive. Nice composition
Thank you!
Thank you!
Thank You,Mark! Glad You
Thank You,Mark! Glad You think the same!
Hmmmm...
I think most of Frost's rhyming poems were broken into stanzas. But I think the message is clear. Welcome to neopoet. If you have questions about navigating here or anything else just ask me or about any member. In the mean time stay safe in Odessa