Poem Body
f – for fire that you keep inside
r – for right to share your inner light
e – for easy way to choose your side
e – for every choice is clear and bright
d – for days are full of joy and glee
o – for options pop-up constantly
m – for many paths you can explore
can you think of something more?
Comments
Hello Anna
I've very much enjoyed reading this rhyming uplifting acrostic piece.
Just one suggestion if I may, try to drop the letter with ”for" at the beginning of each line and see if it reads better. I learnt not to underestimate my reader and they never disappointed me. Even if they don't notice that it's acrostic, they'll enjoy it anyway.
Great to read you. Looking forward to reading more
Thank you for sharing.
I think you...
can go either way with that "for". I don't think it matters that much, although she is right, our readers are not stupid, they can figure it out. I would leave it inb and see what the rest of them say about it. ~ Geez.
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When I Wake Up, I think About This...
Hello, Anna,
Another inspiring poem from you. I always think it's interesting and fun when the rhyming pattern is changed around, like you've done here. I would have to agree to remove the "for" from each of the lines. A couple suggestions you may consider:
f - fire that you keep inside
r - right to share your inner light
or, (probably the most popular form);
Fire that you keep inside
Right to share your inner light
Maybe skip a space between the second to last and final lines. These are just suggestions. It is an inspiring poem, and I enjoyed it.
Thank you!
L
Hi Anna
Well done. I like your interpretation of the word Freedom and the use of acrostics for this piece.