When The Moon is Full

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "When The Moon is Full" effectively employs imagery and personification to create a vivid picture of the transition from day to night. The use of the character 'Aria' as the 'fairy of dusk' adds a mythical element to the poem, which enhances the overall atmosphere.

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. The transition from the 'reign of day' to the 'velvet canvas' of the night could be smoother. The poem could also benefit from a more consistent rhythm or meter to enhance its musicality, as the title 'Aria' suggests a musical piece.

The phrase 'as soon the full moon rises' seems to be missing a word, which disrupts the flow of the poem. It could be revised for clarity and to maintain the rhythm of the poem.

The final stanza effectively captures the moon's ascent in the night sky, but it could be expanded to provide a more satisfying conclusion to the poem. The moon's interaction with the stars, for instance, could be further explored.

In terms of structure, the poem could benefit from more consistent stanza lengths. This would provide a more balanced visual presentation and could enhance the rhythm of the poem.

Finally, the poem could benefit from a more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition and to enrich the imagery. For example, different words or phrases could be used to describe the night sky instead of 'canopy' and 'canvas'.

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This is spectacular Cat. I love your vivid imagery and personification to convey the magic in the transition from day to night and your use of "shy moonbeams" gives the poem a romantic feel to it. It is a captivating and enchanting poem. I think breaking it into natural stanzas will help the reader and create a better visual appeal on the screen.
I loved it. Ruby :) xx

Hello, Cat,
So serene. A gentle flow from dusk into the velvet night and the full moon. Beautiful imagery.
L

Aria, fairy of the dew is gently dropped to the grass
in this piece. She washes the grime from the day's tracks.
I think that you may try to adjust your piece to perform
smoother, by moving the lines a bit. Here's how I would adjust it.

Aria, fairy of dusk
appearing with the first star
she sweeps away the reign of day
by her bidding

With gentle touch
introducing sweet tendrils
of evening
The velvet canvas
takes possession of the canopy
as soon as the full moon rises

First low in the sky
horizon alight
with shy moonbeams
she takes her place
amongst the stars

Of course, as always, you can do what you will with my suggestions.
Use them as is, twist them for your own, or simply trash them.

I like this one very much. It reminds me of a night job I had
many years ago, where I got to step outside to perform certain tasks
and I could look at the moon and stars. Nice and quiet out there,
with minimal noise from inside. Nicely done, ~ Geez.
.

..vocabulary and imagery in this soft-as-velvet piece. It practically has texture. I can't help but wonder how it would translate into an ode or sonnet. Let's see it with stanzas, at least.
...Simply beautiful!

Thomas

The imagery in this brings to mind some of the images from the Disney movie, "Fantasia". Beautiful!

Magic to accompany the moon! I enjoyed the little story within the poem. Beautifully written as usual.

This has a lovely lyrical tone
A picturesque piece setting the scene for a moonrise
Wel done Cat

this is beautiful!! i love the line:
With gentle touch,
introducing
sweet tendrils
of evening.
thank you for sharing!!