within the shock of sudden loss

Poem Body

frozen slivers pierce your mind
a void appears, suspended time

reality can truly bend and twist

silence drops, a great abyss
as somewhere, far away, there slams a door
for he who was and breathed, now is no more

potential pathways forever sealed
and what remains are fragments left by dreams

in this, the place of hard knock revelation
where sudden loss will tattoo lasting scars
know grief's a journey, not a destination
and mountains, sometime, roll on into stars.
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About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Comments

the feelings and sentiments

the feelings and sentiments of profound loss expressed very vividly....i hope i did read this piece well enough...

Regards,

great

display of emotion. Here's my try.

If I can have a choice
I wish to hear your voice ,
and see you smile again
the simple joy, a refrain

Alid

Judy

Grief, a time to feel loss, and to gather all the things that we do, to try and equate our being when someone has gone before.
It is a healing process, though it never feels that way, as it happens from anger to sorrow and all bunched in an emotional train wreck.
Lovely write and I hope that the tears though still there are healing tears and not those of anguish..
Take care and know we are here always,
Yours Ian..

so grieve for a while and shed all tears
then move on as usual without fears