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The Reward of Rancor (TITLE WS final edit)

Poem Body

Lying on my bed,
the silence
is too loud,
ringing
in my head

Anger fades
out of sight
but in my heart
a stubborn pride
resides

Rising restlessness
my mind aches
from solace denied
by the sting of
malice

My soul is
a cracked mirror,
a distorted
self reflection
of self-loathing ,
blooming in colour

The lost truce invites the rule
of despair
when harmony and tranquility
die side by side
giving birth to
this unbearable
silence.....

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

Comments

Hi Alid

An obvious title could be "Why Sleep Eludes"........stan

Hmm

Now that's a very different one from the original title, the one which you gave.. lol. Interesting.

Alid

You are beginning to see

that there can be many more than one "right" title. But there can also be a lot of wrong ones too. The purpose of this shop is to merely get folks to put at least a modicum of thought into what they title their works.......stan

"Pain At Its Best"

Or
"Fighting Pain"
So difficult to suggest a title for someone else.

yes it is

Reckon that's because it's not always possible to discern exactly what a writer is trying to convey and a good title gives at least a hint of that........stan