Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Dec 31, 2022
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week January 1st 2023 to January 7th 2023 🏆 Winner

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Beginnings...

Poem Body

One final satisfying push!
Labor, gratifyingly over...
"It's a beautiful boy"
Nurse says in a smiling voice.
(pain no longer matters)
Gently placing him into
hungry waiting arms.
Healthy!
He is pink and perfect
unconditional love,
both mutual and enduring.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda and many more.

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Comments

Rula

Rula

2 years 3 months ago

Simply stunning!
A winner entry even if it doesn't win

I love it beginning with the title till the last word.
Thank you for sharing dear.

Candlewitch

thank you for being so positive. but I know it won't win, as it isn't in the cards and someone upstairs has it in for me, lol.

Lavender

Hello, Cat,
What a tender, loving poem. Beautiful title!
L

Geezer

justifying the pain of childbirth, and the joy of motherhood! I've been in the delivery-room and watched. It was a life changing experience. The beginning...Nice stuff! ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

My lovely and kind wife is a super hero nurse in the local labor and delivery unit. I assure you she lives for these moments and they pay her for it. These moments are so spiritual and your poem speaks to the magic in that room when those tiny creatures come screaming (hopefully) into this world.

Beautiful job
Tim

RoseBlack

Makes me think of each of my children's birth...all very different ways they entered the world but the end result was the same. So beautifully written.

Alex Tanner

Easy to read Cat, and a happy ending, terrible shame all births could not end like that. Alex

J

I'd say look at my poem too the

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But I like yours more :)