Renga 18 (Rain/Raindrops)

tyro the form you have to use here is Tanka of 5 lines conforming to sequence of syllabi 5/7/5/7/7 to the theme of raindrops/rain. Barbara would then consolidate such tankas posted to form a Renga
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Thanks raj

I couldn’t have said it so precise being as detail as I can get sometimes. Lol

Hi Tyro

Nice to meet. You join by commenting here and asking. I just add you

Hi Barbara, I want to join this workshop

Not sure if this qualifies

Tears of heaven
quench the thirst of the earth,
plants and animals.

the rebirth of the dead land
celebration of life

Alid

Hi Alid

wonderful to see you back....loved your Tanka...
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Hi Alid

Great poem but your syllables count is off
5/7/5/7/7
You are in

gee, Barbara

can you point out where cos I can't find it.

Alid

Alid, if i may step in

quench the thirst of the earth [six syllabi],

celebration of life [six syllabi]

I am sure you can fix both
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suggestions

quench the thirst of the earth [six syllabi], could be turned to
quench the thirst of mother earth [seven syllabi],

celebration of life {six syllabi] could be turned to
true celebration of life [seven syllabi]
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Hello Barbara

do you post your poem here, or in the stream?

Hello tyro

Post your poem here

Response

this poetry form is new to me. Glad it was introduced, I know that it consist of two stanzas and multiple writers. What if you don't have anyone to collab with?

Hi heartfelt

You are here collabing now. That’s what this workshop is all about. Just share your haiku or senyru here with two couplet added and you have a tanka.

Love fall from heaven

Love fall from heaven
dark skies rain clouds are forming
silvery droplets

body cries out for comfort
from a stream boiling inside.

adding my two pence

sometimes as drizzle
at times in heavy torrent
drops of rain perform

the stage suddenly lights up
to announce upcoming act
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Wonder two pence

Just a tad syllables count 5/7/4/8/6 correction 5/7/5/7/7

thanks Barbara for the catch.

thanks Barbara for the catch. I have now conformed to 5/7/5/7/7.
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Sun heats the waters

Sun heats the waters
Mist is freed of gravity
The clouds puff out full

Butterfly exits cocoon
As clear drops fall on my head.

Welcome tyro to the Renga

Welcome tyro to the Renga with your vivid tanka...

"as clear drops fall on my head" create a picture that you are enjoying the rain without an umbrella
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Came up with this oneof Napolean

kids get excited
to sail paper boats on streams
to voyage their dreams

some are of the warrior
Napoleon Bonaparte
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Great poem

I really like this little nugget. It’s not about rain or raindrops but kids sailing paper boats on streams works for me

one more...

grey clouds bear rain drops
form rainbow against sunlight
to brush them on soil

soon a painting emerges
so very pleasing to eyes
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Great

Nice one

how about this

kids splash in puddles
adults walk in umbrellas
two talking pictures

first iconic of delight
other of missing the bus
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Barbara

Misted by the sun
Cooled and mixed in with the dust
Drops to thirsty earth.

Children splash in the puddles
This is life itself to all.

Ian..

Wonderful Ian

Add two more lines, a couplet with 7 syllables each and your haiku will become a Tanka.

Barbara

Hope this is what you need for the Tanka, have a lovely day out there, Yours as always Ian..xx

Wonderful wonderful

I think the second line in the 3 line haiku needs to more syllables. I count five. I maybe off tho being American dialect. lol.

Beautiful lines.

Im not sure cooled and mixed are two syllables. Would you share the dictionary. I’ve realized dialect are different.

Barbara

I must have used a bad counter so now corrected the problem, Thanks for all you do,
Take care and my love to all,
Yours as always Ian. x

it's foot ball world cup time hence this :)

drenched from head to toe
kids return home in delight
because schools are closed

sun smiles again from the sky
to watch children play football
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oo oo, Barbara, I'm late joining this one!

Do I follow on from raj's

sun smiles again from the sky
to watch children play football

Jess

it doesn't necessarily have to connect with the previous Tanka... you post your tanka and Barbara latr connects all tankas posted here like links of a chain....in a separate link
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raj

one more

why is rain biased
about when and where to fall
rather than bless all

flooding some with her riches
not reaching those famine lands

one more

sweeping all rubbish
that is littered everywhere
cleansing air as well

if ever she is enraged
wrecks a havoc in her path
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Glad you’re here jess

You can write a whole Tanka. Or as you did a couplet to raj haiku creating a Tanka. Collaboration at its best. I’ve allowed changes as they make the workshop more creative and inspiring. Not rigid or strict to form. Except for 5/7/5/7/7 is the only for Japanese. I am expanding to other forms as raj is saying but haven’t yet. It’s time now to do so. ready to create it with other poetry forms that is still collaborative in native. .

I’m wanna thanks everybody

If I’ve left out anybody’s ready to go Tanka let me know so I can correct it. Sparrow alidzain and heartfelt are ones I see haven’t been linked to renga. . Let me know how I can help get you there. Happy rengas are happy poets

Description: Modern Day Renga Poetry

Leader: Barbara Writes
Moderator(s): raj

Objectives: To bring Neopoets together to sharpen their poetic skill, share their poems, and critique Poetry of others. It is a place to interact and co-write Poetry together.

Level of expertise: Open to all

Subject matter: Renga Theme: Rain/Raindrops is to be written in Japanese format. Haiku 5/7/5, senyru 5/7/5, tanka 5/7/5/7/7 and Renga (Eternal string of tanka)