Barbara Writes
By Barbara Writes, 10 July, 2014
Date
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Short description
A Song of passion
Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 9 months ago

Love this another Renga, hope this piece is good enough to start you off on a journey into feelings, I feel that there will be a few warm words creeping in on this one, lol
Take care young Barbara enjoy each moment, Yours Ian.T

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

alidzain

Here's my contribution.

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Alid

Barbara Writes

These verses are beautiful. Thanks for getting things started. I'll be enrolling ppl up to Sunday then the work shop will be underway.

Barbara Writes

These verses are beautiful. Thanks for getting things started. I'll be enrolling ppl up to Sunday then the work shop will be underway.

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

R

raj

10 years 9 months ago

If you enroll me in this workshop, I wish to add as under

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 9 months ago

An addition to the stream of thought:-

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Yours as always Ian.T

Barbara Writes

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be you
Coping enduring the bad
With the good isn't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Just know you is where you live.

R

raj

10 years 9 months ago

SingIt

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be you
Coping enduring the bad
With the good isn't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Just know you is where you live.

Sing with heart and soul
just because you want to sing
alone or in choir

Feel the song not just listen
soak in the experience

*

Barbara Writes

Lovely addition

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be you
Coping enduring the bad
With the good isn't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Just know you are where you live.

Sing with heart and soul
just because you want to sing
alone or in choir

Feel the song not just listen
soak in the experience

alidzain

Fighting to be you
Coping enduring the bad
With the good isn't easy.

The syllables' count of the 3rd line in this stanza is not 5. Can someone help rectify?

Alid

Barbara Writes

Thank I sure missed that.

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be you
Coping enduring the bad
With good ain't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Just know you are where you live.

Sing with heart and soul
just because you want to sing
alone or in choir

Feel the song not just listen
soak in the experience

Barbara Writes

Welcome to the workshop. We're waiting for your addition. The workshop is well underway. it'll end on July 27/14. The beautiful verses of passion already written is flowing good.

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be self (Made a slight edit)
Coping enduring the bad
With good ain't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Know you are where you reside. (Made a slight edit)

Sing with heart and soul
just because you want to sing
alone or in choir

Feel the song not just listen
soak in the experience

Barbara Writes

Tomorrow is the last day to add more additions then I'll be closing.

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be self (Made a slight edit)
Coping enduring the bad
With good ain't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Know you are where you reside. (Made a slight edit)

Sing with heart and soul
just because you want to sing
alone or in choir

Feel the song not just listen
soak in the experience

Then there is true love
That grows like summer wildflowers
As free as the wind

alidzain

raise your voice to the heavens
let your spirit soar up high

Alid

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 9 months ago

Maybe I can put the finishing touches to this one as I started it off a few words ago:-

Let me therefore stay
Within your feelings to roam
In your heart is home

As we can live forever
Because we believe in us..

A good workshop of this type of writing I look forward to the next part as we have driven passion forward to its limits lol,
Yours Ian.T

Barbara Writes

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be you
Coping enduring the bad
With good ain't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Just know you are where you live.

Sing with heart and soul
just because you want to sing
alone or in choir

Feel the song not just listen
soak in the experience

Then there is true love
That grows like summer wildflowers
As free as the windM

raise your voice to the heavens
let your spirit soar up high

Let me therefore stay
Within your feelings to roam
In your heart is home

As we can live forever
Because we believe in us..

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 9 months ago

This reads well and holds many facets of the passion, now we must chose another feeling to play with in our search for verse.
Thank you young lady for overseeing this Renga, I look forward to the next part of our journey,
Yours Ian.T

Barbara Writes

Enjoyed the journey with you guys. It's always pleasure meeting at the renga workshops. If ever you have an idea you'd like to renga. Simply let me know and I'll open renga workshop to accommodate it.

Thanks for another fine renga.
This is renga 8 "a song of passion" I'm ending to post to the stream tonight.

Barbara Writes

We must learn to sing
Teach us of your ways of love
Show me the rapture

See how the passion rises
Shield me not from true loving

Let us dance with joy
as we celebrate this life
painted with laughter

Embrace innocence again
Release the heart from malice

Wide eyed innocence
Blissful days of childishness
Boys run after girls

Embrace the cheerful laughter
Remember days of your youth

In each beat of heart
listen to the melody
in high and low notes

Write a song, lend it a tune
sing along the swings of life

Love in innocence
Unconditional love blooms
A truth in all ways.

Learn of others how to feel
Feel love with your inner soul.

Fighting to be you
Coping enduring the bad
With good ain't easy.

Some don't accept uniqueness
Just know you are where you live.

Sing with heart and soul
just because you want to sing
alone or in choir

Feel the song not just listen
soak in the experience

Then there is true love
That grows like summer wildflowers
As free as the windM

raise your voice to the heavens
let your spirit soar up high

Let me therefore stay
Within your feelings to roam
In your heart is home

As we can live forever
Because we believe in us..

Co Writers

Ian. T
alizarin
Raj
Barbara Writes

Ian.T

We could do a series on feelings, now that passion is near finished, time to cool down to the real meaning of love, lol,
Then its co runner hate which is on the other side of the fence but one at a time will do.
Go well young lady and I hope this finds you well, and happy, Yours Ian

Barbara Writes

Great idea. We can do that. What do you suggest the title of this renga be.

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 9 months ago

My mind held vice like
Kept me a captive for years
Now I am so free

I was feared to even leave
Why could I not see my life

A start on a Renga about those woman that are held in a bad place, this Renga may get through to help or just to point out some of the feelings.
I can't talk from my experiences as I is not of that gender lol
You have lovely day and keep writing,
Yours Ian.T xx
PS:- needs a title

Description: This is a meeting place for all poets on Neopoet to come and post verses of poetry to "Eternal Renga" So, come as a group or individual and post your verses anytime. This is an ongoing collaborative effort that could go on for hundreds of verses. A truly Neopoet group effort. Let's co-operate to create a truly Neopoet poem.

Leader: Barbara Writes
Moderator(s):

Objectives: To have everyone at Neopoet collaborating a Renga poem.

Level of expertise: Open to all.

Subject matter: "Each person write a verse, alternately senryu or haiku 5-7-5 syllables then a couplet of 7-7 syllables"
I can only say that the rules can not be strictly applied when writing in English. Japanese has such a completely different sound structure, grammar and even thematic considerations considered appropriate for poetry. So we have simplified it.

Alternate 3 line verses of
5-7-5 syllables like a haiku or senryu
and 2 line verses of
7--7 syllables.
Syllable Counter: http://www.poetrysoup.com/haiku_syllable_counter/

We just ask you read the preceding verses to try to maintain some thematic coherency.

As such feel free to introduce modern, western themes, but read what has been written before and make it relevant, please.