Barbara Writes
By Barbara Writes, 26 November, 2014
Participants
Ian.T
Barbara Writes
arja
Rula
judyanne
Sparrow
Skill level
Plunge Pool
Date
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Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 5 months ago

So' Westerly wind
Bringing the warm rain to me
From across the waves

Life is drawn up from the sea
Atlantic water so free..

Yours as always Ian.T

alidzain

The second line - Brings the warm rain to me" is short of one syllable count.

Suggestion for change - Brings forth the warm rain to me

Alid

Ian.T

Bring-s, is classified as two syllables but will change it to Bringing so that it is absolute, take care out there and thanks for your support, Yours Ian.

alidzain

My contribution

The wind in my land
dances with summer's hot air
which cools when it rains

the heat can be intense
when the rainy days are gone

Alid

Ian.T

This one needs attention as "In ten se" is three syllables.
"The heat here is intense." = 8 syllables
These things are not so easy to write and the odd word in different parts of the world sometimes has two or three syllables as my Brings.
I have put a list of the different winds on a Blog it is titled,
"The many Winds" ( For Barbara's Renga 12) so that we can learn from each others places, come back to me on this one.
Yours Ian

Ian.T

It will be a pleasure to have you join us here, Barbara has set the rules for the theme.
I have posted a Blog with many of the names for the wind in many parts of the world, I have looked through the list and there are a few from your part of the world, but this would be a chance to use your own word for the English wind.
Take care and we wait for your post,
Yours, Ian

arja

thanks Ian! ..and off I go
to get acquainted
to the various winds of life

I will try to set my eyes
on familiar winds of life

Barbara Writes

Welcome to Renga 12. And thank you ian for moderating the WS. I will certainly add you Arja. Thanks for joining. Alidzain as always you're here to support and help with thre Renga WS. Thanks to you. Ian would you post a link to you winds blog for participants to research. I will add the link to the syllabus. (I'm waiting to be scheduled for surgery to remove two tooth that been infecting my body for a while now, expensive just hope it can get done soon before I lose my mind lol.
Either way, I'm here and leading the WS.

R

raj

10 years 5 months ago

Deleted invalid entry. Withdrawing from the WS

Regards,

alidzain

According to Ian, "brings" are considered 2 syllable counts so this line -
"brings promise of a rainbow" have 8 syllable counts altogether.

alid

R

As Alid has pointed out this doesn't fit the criterion. So I have deleted it being invalid.

Regards,

Barbara Writes

I haven't seen it before you deleted it. I'll read the revision to see if I can or you can repost it here. I'll put it in the renga. I gonna place the tanka already shared by y'all on the stream tonight to be read and viewed in the renga poem. I think reading the different winds around the world in one poem will be so beautiful.

I enjoy your WS participation and ask that you not withdraw. As far as I know ''brings'' is one syllable not two. Syllable counters are not always accurate. So I tend to go with what the dictionary says. I don't depend solely on any syllable counter eventhough I use them.

I On here and will catch my updates tonight and I appreciate everyone here. Thanks again Ian for moderating in my absence. Rula thanks for explaining the issue with "brings" so gracefully eventhough you haven't decided to join yet. You are more than welcome to participate.

Wtite as many tanka as you wish. This is a one of a kind renga poem that will make everyone proud to be apart of. I know nothing about names of wind and is happy Ian did the hard work of finding so many and sharing with us. I tried researching in Google and it is extremely difficult to find. I unsuccessfully tried yesterday to find wind for South Carolina. Lol.

Ian.T

South Carolina, doesn't seem to have any singular name for the wind there, though there is one reference to "September gales," as a local happening.
Most of your storms are Tropical ones or hurricanes, and as Hurricanes are named each time you have a wide variety of names to write of lol.
Sorry you only have hurricanes could be very wet and windy there.
There are a couple of old storms from the 1700's to 1800's that are worth writing about.
A ship that brought people over the Atlantic arrived in the area and was destroyed by a storm with the loss of all lives, so I suppose there is much to write of.
You take care and I hope you are feeling better now, Yours as always, Ian.

S

We have almost every type wind you can think of lol. Hurricanes, tornados, thunderstorms, gales, frontal winds from all directions........heck we even have broken winds lol..........stan

R

Thanks for your comment. For the time being though I would like to take a break and not be a part of this WS.

Regards,

Barbara Writes

That's okay with me. I just don't want you to withdraw bc of hard feeling. All of us need a break at times. I hope you feel better and your profile get worked out. I lost a poem with good critique. Somehow it got deleted. I changed the title and was able to resubmit. I receive more critique. I was revising when this happen. I'm just glad I revised it in word doc and it was saved. Be cheerful my friend.

R

Appreciate your words of encouragement. Believe me there are no hard feelings. Just that I am not feeling up to it. Else, as I have often mentoned, U ejoy participating in your Workshops.

Regards,

Rula

Can never be two syllables. Nor "intense"can be of three syllables.
Each VOWEL SOUND makes a syllable
Check the trustful dictionaries. Syllable counters don't give always accurate count.
Hope this helps.

Raj, I am not participating here yet, but I wish you would re-consider your withdrawing.
I really like your little gems.
Will you?

R

Thanks for your words of encouragement which are truly appreciated. However, for now I am preferring to take a break since nothing is working out for me these days. The entire poem which I had drafted for Stan's contest got deleted before I could post it, in spite of the best efforts of Mr. Andrew to recover it. May be its time for me to take a brek. By the wy, I notice you have put a new profile pic. I would love to know what the graphic means.

Regards,

Rula

this is absolutely your decision.

Ian.T

Thank you for you valued input, we always have trouble with the number of syllables, local accents and other things come into play, I changed brings to bringing to be clear of problems, it is not that important if there is the odd one missing or added, as far as I know.
The pieces streamed at this moment are about wind and the effect but the whole point of this one was to name the wind and what it means to the writer.
I shall tomorrow write a couple more as examples or for streaming, to show the winds Name.
I put out a blog with most of the different winds and where they are.
There are quite a few for the Deserts and many types of land across the world so I hope we learn of winds from all over.
You have a great area to pull from, this also gives us a chance to learn of others and to express ourselves in a short piece.
Thanks form your help, thinking of you out there,
Yours, Ian

Ian.T

A great write and it is spot on for the theme of the Workshop with the "Scirocco" wind that haunts the desert and many middle Eastern Countries.
I hope others follow your example,
Yours as always, Ian x

judyanne

i don't have time at the moment to join this workshop

but, and i hope you don't mind, i wrote a poem about the afternoon breeze here in Perth Western Australia, for the education of anyone interested in what we call it....

Fremantle Doctor
blows the cool afternoon breeze
straight to my front door

brings balm from the southern sea
and relief from summer’s sting

love judy
xxx

Barbara Writes

You joined when you added this beautiful piece. I'm a add you as a participant and place it in the renga poem. My WS is designed for anybody to drop in share a tanka leave and not be concern about not having time. Thanks for your 2 sec. lol much appreciated.

alidzain

A graceful wind blew,
comforting the mind and soul
frees men from their stress

Unlike the furious typhoon
which spreads terror in its wake

Alid

Ian.T

A good write, only tiny thing would not frees be better than free in the third line,
Great that you have a hurricane in there, now we is cooking on Gas,
Yours Ian.

arja

arja

10 years 4 months ago

Cyclone Haiyan came
leaving people's hearts broken
homeless and hungry

I kept watching the headlines
I feel hope dying in them

Ian.T

Can't stay it is really late 00-38 your day is full and I must go dream.
This one is great and will be added when Barbara sorts out the main entry,
Take care young Lady, know that we think of you,
Yours Ian

Rula

Rula

10 years 4 months ago

Arab Spring winds blow
On the middle East countries
They call for justice.

Instead destruction prevailed
Dust covered everyone's heart

arja

arja

10 years 4 months ago

another cyclone
as people anticipate
my faith is tested

shall we wait in fear for life?
or prepare for it's coming?

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 4 months ago

Abroholos kicks up
A squall on my coastal plain
Only fish will gain

The Amazon with its waters
Will not notice this small spray..

Aejej swirls the sand
It plays in Morocco’s land
Devil in other talk

Twisting spirals in the sand
Fun time for wind in my land

Aeolus God of wind
The boss so the Greeks will say
In olden days their way

The regent of all the winds
A life giver, Aellai’s guard

Southeast wind blows
Cape Doctor knocks at the door
The Cape has shivers

Beware sailors as you sail
Round the Cape, skirt the shore.

Ian.T

I will go through the list of winds and find a few more to put in the Renga.
Hope you are feeling better now and that the teeth are OK, I have to have the rest of mine out next year as they is past their resale date, have a great day out there, Yours Ian, and the Children..

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 4 months ago

I am just about ready to retire to dream land, I have put a few more of the winds together for you, I only wish the others would write a bit more.
Do they never get the wind, I shall have to enquire as to what their diet is, as my flatulence may become out of control.
Here are a few more writes from the list I Blogged:-
.
I remember you
All soldiers from other lands
In your fight for me

When Bad-I-Sad-O-Bist-Roz
Blows in Afghanistan
.
Old Krakatoa blew
Bali Wind threw dust my way
The Noise was too much

It was eighteen eighty three
Summer days shattered for me.
.
Beware the Barber
A watery gloom to you
It will freeze your hair

Ice storms in another size
Your beard and eye lashes freeze.
.
The East wind does blow
Bentu de Soli is warm
Sun bathing still fun

Sardinia’s breeze won’t freeze
This really is quite warm.
.
Trust the Aussies words
Brickfielder sounds strange to me
To tell of a wind.

It blows dust in their eyes
I realize why they squint (lol)

Briza blows rain
Monsoon season once again
We need to keep dry

Philippines annual splash
Feeds the crops, we eat again.

Take care all of you out there and please join in and write as many as you can.
The list is still there in that Blog of mine, I shall continue tomorrow,
Yours Ian.T

Barbara Writes

sharing so many winds in one poem has been excellent. Hope everyone enjoyed learning about winds aroind the globe. The renga has come to a close. If there are any last minute offers post them here for submission into the renga for the stream
Thanks to all of you for joining.

Sparrow

Sparrow talking here
There is nothing like good air
It keeps me up there

High above the mauling crowd
In peace I can hide in cloud

Please believe in me
Your spirit soars free you see
It is so simple

Just find a spot that pleases
Drift inside tranquillity

You are still advertising the Renga so I thought I would keep writing lol,
Have a lovely Peaceful day out there as we are ahead of you in time I have enjoyed this day so see how it is when it reaches out for you, Yours Ian x

Workshop: Renga 12 “Winds Of Life”

Description: This is a meeting place for all poets on Neopoet to collaboratively write and learn Japanese poetry writing. In this workshop you will learn to write (4) four different Japanese poetry form.

1. Haiku three lines of poetry written with 5/7/5 syllables
2. Senyru three lines of poetry written with 5/7/5 syllables
3. Tanka five lines of poetry written with 5/7/5/7/7 syllables
4. Renga a string of tanka poems from two or more poets.

Leader: Barbara Writes
Moderator(s) Ian. T

Objective: The object of writing about the wind is as usual Nature, at the same time it will bring in poets from all over writing about the winds in their part of their world.
Here it is the South Westerly etc: The Chinook in Canada and so on, I expect you have a local wind or name for it where you live.
It lets others learn about your surroundings and teaches them how to research, and then how to assemble their writes into a poetic piece.
I think that the winds throughout the world have assisted mankind for always, as the monsoons of India and to write about a special one in the poets eyes will bring a good dimension to the words. You will write a Haiku, Senyru, Tanka thus creating a Renga.

Level of expertise: Open to all.

Subject matter: Write a about “Winds in your part of the world”.

Tanka

I know not the name
Of local wind where I live
Research must be fun

Learning about surrounding
Of others brings together.

Clink the link here to learn of different WINDS compiled on Ian. T's blog.
https://www.neopoet.com/iant/blog/thu-2014-11-27-0003